自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammatical errors (use past tense for childhood), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and I practiced on it every weekend until I could ride confidently. Because of that bike I learned independence and enjoyed spending time outdoors.

建議: Improve coherence and grammar: use clear contrast words (e.g., 'Previously' vs 'Now'), correct verb forms, and finish your comparison. Provide one specific reason and an example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words ('umm').

範例: Previously, bikes were not very popular in my country. However, they have become much more common recently because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes; for example, many office workers now cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I do have a bike. When I was a child I remembered it was given to me by my father and I would really want to have a bike to learn to ride and to learn to use it and that's why I requested it to have a bike when I was little.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. When I was a child, I remember it was given to me by my father; I really wanted a bike to learn to ride, and that's why I asked him for one when I was little.

Grammar problem type ID:6 Present tense issue and ID:5 Past tense issue and ID:26 Sentence structure errors. The student mixes present and past tenses incorrectly (saying 'do have' about childhood and 'remembered' with past reference). Use simple past 'had' and 'remember' (or 'remembered' consistently) for past events. 'Would really want' is incorrect for a past desire; use 'really wanted'. 'Requested it to have a bike' is ungrammatical—use 'asked him for one'. Also punctuation and sentence structure needed improvement: split into clearer clauses and use commas/semicolon to connect related ideas.

× Before, I think the bike is not popular in the country, but in today's in today's umm current event bike is very popular due to more convenient and use for transportation. As far as transportation to go to work, it is more convenient rather than.

✓ Previously, I thought bikes were not popular in the country, but today bikes are very popular because they are more convenient for transportation. For commuting to work, they are more convenient than other options.

Grammar problem type ID:6 Present tense issue and ID:1 Singular and plural issue and ID:26 Sentence structure errors and ID:11 Incorrect use of prepositions. The student mixes tenses ('Before, I think' should be past 'I thought'), uses singular 'the bike' instead of plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, and repeats words ('in today's in today's'). Use 'today' or 'now' and the simple present 'are' for general current facts. 'Due to more convenient and use for transportation' is ungrammatical: use 'because they are more convenient for transportation.' The final fragment 'it is more convenient rather than' is incomplete; compare 'more convenient than other options'.