自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, use correct grammar and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb agreement and remove fillers. For example, mention what kind of bike it was and a brief memory or ability (e.g., how well you rode).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels at first, and I remember learning to ride it in my neighborhood park. After a few weeks I could ride without help and felt very confident.

建議: Answer directly, use clearer structure and specific examples, and correct word choice. Begin with a direct statement about your country, then compare with Germany using a linking phrase (e.g., “However” or “In contrast”). Replace hesitations and incorrect words (e.g., “riots” → “ride”) and give a specific example about when or why people cycle.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience. However, in Germany cycling is much more common; for example, many families go for bike rides on Sundays and cities have extensive bike lanes, which makes cycling safe and attractive.

× I had the bike when I were was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes two forms ('were' and 'was') and uses the definite article 'the' incorrectly. For a non-specific bike, use the indefinite article 'a'. Use the correct past tense of 'to be' for first person singular: 'I was'. Suggestion: keep past simple 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× I rode really well, but it was a bike with UH-4 umm. If four will.

✓ I rode really well, but it was a bike with four wheels.

The original contains filler words and an incorrect fragment 'If four will.' The intended noun is 'wheels' (plural) after a number. Use the noun phrase 'four wheels.' Keep past tense 'rode' consistent. Suggestion: remove fillers and say 'it was a bike with four wheels.'

× In my country, I'm not sure that bikes are very popular, uh, but in the country where I lived before, it's really popular.

✓ In my country, I'm not sure that bikes are very popular, but in the country where I lived before, they are really popular.

The sentence mixes plural subject 'bikes' with singular verb 'it's.' For plural noun use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are.' Also maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: say 'they are really popular.'

× Uh, in Germany it's really popular.

✓ In Germany they are really popular.

Same error: 'bikes' (plural) requires plural pronoun/verb. 'It's' (it is) is singular; replace with 'they are' to agree with plural subject. Suggestion: use 'They are' when referring to plural nouns like 'bikes.'

× Uh, families on Sundays, uh, riots bikes often.

✓ On Sundays, families often ride bikes.

The verb 'riots' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ride' in present simple for plural subject 'families': 'families ride.' Word order should be natural: time expression 'On Sundays' at the start, then subject and verb, and adverb 'often' before verb or after subject. Suggestion: 'On Sundays, families often ride bikes.'