自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки, повторения и нечёткую структуру. Исправьте время (используйте past simple), уберите лишние слова и объедините идеи в 2–3 предложения. Добавьте конкретику (например, чей это был велосипед, как вы его использовали) и свяжите предложения связующими словами.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was actually two small bikes, one green and one pink, that my parents bought for me and my sister. I loved riding them around the neighbourhood because they were light and easy to handle.

建議: Ответ содержит hesitations («umm»), повторы и неверную конструкцию. Сформулируйте чёткую тему, дайте 1–2 поддерживающих причины с связующими словами и приведите пример. Избегайте излишних слов и исправьте порядок слов в предложениях.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. They are a convenient and affordable way to get around, especially in crowded cities, so many families encourage children to learn to ride from an early age. For example, my neighbour cycles to work every day and her kids use bikes to go to school.

× Yes I have a bike when I was a child and I haven't had a 2 bikes and.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I haven't had two bikes.

The speaker mixes present and past tenses. The action 'having a bike when I was a child' should be in the past tense ('had') not present ('have'). Also 'haven't had two bikes' uses present perfect to express that up to now the speaker has not owned two bikes; keep that if intended. Use the word 'two' instead of the numeral '2' in formal speech and add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use past tense for past time references and use words instead of numerals in speech transcripts.

× There are green and pink.

✓ They were green and pink.

After referring to the bikes previously, use a pronoun that matches the noun ('they') and match tense to the earlier past context ('were' instead of 'are'). 'There are' is used to state existence, but here the student describes attributes of known items. Suggestion: Use 'they were green and pink' or 'they were green and pink in color.'

× I loved these bikes.

✓ I loved those bikes.

When speaking about items in the past and not immediately present, 'those' is more appropriate than 'these.' The past tense verb 'loved' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'those' for distant past references.

× I think yes, bikes are really popular in my country and I think umm, everyone should have a bike, umm, because it's comfortable to use and I think umm parents have to buy bikes them children's children.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country, and everyone should have a bike because they are comfortable to use. I also think parents should buy bikes for their children.

Multiple issues: redundancy with repeated 'I think' and filler 'umm' should be removed in corrected sentence. 'It's comfortable' is singular and unclear—use plural 'they are comfortable' to match 'bikes'. The phrase 'parents have to buy bikes them children's children' is ungrammatical; use 'parents should buy bikes for their children.' Use modal 'should' to express recommendation. Suggestion: Remove fillers, match number between subject and verb, and use correct prepositional phrase 'for their children.'