自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, cohesion, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., why it was memorable, where you rode it). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and check word choice (e.g., “ride” not “write”, “friend’s house”, “around the playground”).

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child — I received it as a present from my father when I was eleven. It was blue and had two wheels, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house and to cycle around the local playground every afternoon. I remember it well because it gave me more freedom to explore my neighbourhood.

建議: Make the main opinion clear, correct sentence structure, and add specific supporting reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “do use a lot of bikes walking.” Use contrast or cause (e.g., because of traffic, low cost, health). Keep it concise and grammatical.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and useful for short journeys. For example, many people cycle to work or school to avoid traffic and save money. As a result, cycling is a common and practical way to get around in cities.

× Yes, I got a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I received a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'got' which is informal and can be ambiguous; 'received' is a clearer past-tense verb for obtaining a gift. Use past tense to match 'when I was a child.'

× I was 11 years old.

✓ I was eleven years old.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; change to spelled-out number for formality. No structural grammar error.

× My father gave it to me as a present because I got a high school in my studies.

✓ My father gave it to me as a present because I got high marks in my studies.

The phrase 'got a high school' is incorrect. Likely intended meaning is achieving high grades. Use 'got high marks' or 'received high marks' and 'in my studies' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× That time it was blue with two wheels.

✓ At that time it was blue and had two wheels.

Sentence needs a time preposition 'At that time' and clearer verb structure: 'had two wheels' rather than 'with two wheels' to make a complete clause.

× I use it to write to my friend house or just to hang out in the playground under my.

✓ I used it to ride to my friend's house or just to hang out in the playground near my home.

Multiple errors: tense should be past 'used' to match earlier past context. 'Write to my friend house' is incorrect verb and noun; likely 'ride to my friend's house.' Possessive apostrophe needed: 'friend's house.' 'Under my' is incomplete; likely 'near my home.' Also 'ride' is correct verb for bicycle use, not 'write.'

× To be honest, they're quite popular in my country.

✓ To be honest, they are quite popular in my country.

Contraction is acceptable; expanded form is clearer. Verb 'are' correctly matches plural 'they' in present tense. No major grammatical error.

× They do use a lot of bikes walking instead of cars and the.

✓ Many people use bicycles a lot, walking less and using them instead of cars.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. Recast to clarify subject 'Many people,' correct verb usage 'use bicycles,' and contrast 'instead of cars.' 'Walking' placement was incorrect; if intended meaning was people walk more, rewrite accordingly. Also remove trailing 'and the.'