自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct repetition and grammar, and add a clear topic sentence with one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid long run-on sentences and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct the repetition (“my sister's friends’ bikes”), use past habits correctly (“used to borrow”), and give a brief reason or result.

範例: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child. Instead, I used to borrow my sister's friends' bikes, and they sometimes taught me how to ride. However, I never really got the hang of it, so I usually gave up after a few tries.

建議: Make one clear opinion statement, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammatical errors and unclear phrases (e.g., “the road is very it doesn't support bikes” and “traffic wheels are barely enforced”). Use vocabulary like “infrastructure,” “traffic laws,” and “road safety” for precision. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, bikes aren't very popular in my country. This is because our road infrastructure favors cars, and there are few dedicated bike lanes; moreover, traffic laws and road safety enforcement are weak, which makes cycling unsafe for many people.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I would often borrow my sister's my sister's friends bikes and they would teach me how to ride a bike but unfortunately I never got the hang of it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I would often borrow my sister's friends' bikes and they would teach me how to ride a bike, but unfortunately I never got the hang of it.

Errors: repeated phrase 'my sister's' is redundant and confusing; possession with plural friends requires the apostrophe after friends (friends'). Also the sentence is long and needs a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove the duplicated words, use correct possessive punctuation for plural noun (friends'), and add a comma before the final 'but' to clarify the clause boundary.

× No, not really. I don't think bikes are very popular in our country because the road is very it doesn't support bikes and it usually supports cars more often and traffic wheels are barely enforced here.

✓ No, not really. I don't think bikes are very popular in our country because the roads don't support bikes; they usually favor cars, and traffic rules are barely enforced here.

Errors: 'the road is very it doesn't support bikes' is ungrammatical and contains a pronoun/structure problem; 'road' should be plural 'roads' for general statements (or use 'the road system'); 'it doesn't support bikes' is awkward—use 'don't support bikes' to match plural subject. 'Traffic wheels' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'traffic rules'. Also 'usually supports cars more often' is redundant; simplified to 'usually favor cars'. Suggestions: use plural 'roads' for general facts, ensure subject-verb agreement, replace incorrect noun 'traffic wheels' with 'traffic rules', and break into clearer clauses with punctuation.