自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatically correct with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid filler words, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, start with “Yes, I did” (past simple), explain why briefly, and give a specific memory or result.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was six because they wanted me to learn balance and independence. As a result, I practiced in the park every weekend and quickly became confident riding on my own.

建議: Answer directly with correct grammar and add a specific reason or example, using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Use plural agreement and avoid overgeneralization. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and give a clear supporting detail such as who uses bikes and where.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children use them as their first toy. For example, in my neighborhood most parents buy small bicycles for their kids, and children often ride them in the evenings and on weekends.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I walk tall because my dad always want me to can ride a bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child because my dad always wanted me to learn to ride a bike.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense 'had' and 'was'. 'Want' must be past 'wanted' to match time frame. 'Can' is unnecessary and incorrect here; use 'learn to' or 'learn how to' instead of 'can ride'. Also 'when I walk tall' is ungrammatical for 'when I was a child' and was replaced accordingly. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use correct verb phrasing: 'my dad wanted me to learn to ride a bike'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And yeah, I like to ride a bike because umm, it is the first toy that I Start learning to ride some things.

✓ And yeah, I liked riding a bike because it was the first toy with which I started learning to ride things.

Use past tense 'liked' and 'was' to match childhood context. 'Start' should be past 'started' and not capitalized. Phrase 'Start learning to ride some things' is awkward; use 'started learning to ride things' or 'started learning how to ride'. Also use 'with which' or simpler 'that helped me start learning to ride things'. Suggestion: keep verbs in past and choose clearer phrasing: 'It was the first toy that helped me start learning to ride.' Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yeah, I think bikes is popular in my country because all of children around my house always ride a bike and their parents always buy the bike for their first toy.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country because all the children around my house always ride bikes and their parents often buy them as their first toy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'bikes' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. 'All of children' is incorrect; use 'all the children' or 'all of the children'. Plural consistency: 'ride a bike' becomes 'ride bikes' and 'buy the bike' becomes 'buy them' or 'buy a bike'. Also 'always' may be too strong; 'often' is a better choice unless certain. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and keep number agreement across nouns and pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:27