自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant and gives a good personal detail, but it is a bit long and repetitive. To improve, make the first sentence a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repeating obvious information (e.g. ‘‘when I was a child’’ twice) and trim excess words to stay within five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike with training wheels that my parents bought me. I rode it every morning around my neighborhood, and I felt independent because I could go out by myself.

建議: The answer addresses the question but has some grammar and vocabulary inaccuracies and could be slightly more specific. Improve by using plural and natural collocations (e.g. "bikes are popular" , "people use them for commuting"), add one specific reason or example, and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting to work. For example, in big cities they are faster than cars during rush hour and they are cheaper to maintain, so lots of commuters prefer them.

× Yes, bike is very popular in our country because there's a lot of people using for the commute, going to their jobs and it's very convenient.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because there are a lot of people using them to commute to their jobs, and it's very convenient.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match the general statement (singular/plural issue). 'There's a lot of people' is incorrect because 'there are' agrees with the plural noun 'people' (subject-verb agreement and 'there be' issue). 'Using for the commute' is unidiomatic; use 'using them to commute' and include the pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes' (incorrect use of pronouns and prepositions). Also add 'to' before 'their jobs'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for generalizations, ensure 'there is/are' matches the subject, include appropriate object pronouns, and use 'to commute' rather than 'for the commute'.

× there's a lot of people using for the commute, going to their jobs and it's very convenient.

✓ there are a lot of people using them to commute to their jobs, and it's very convenient.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' and should be 'there are' because the notional subject 'a lot of people' is plural. Also include the object pronoun 'them' after 'using' and use 'to commute' for the verb phrase. Suggestion: choose 'there is' or 'there are' based on whether the following noun is singular or plural and keep necessary object pronouns after verbs like 'use'.

× there's a lot of people using for the commute, going to their jobs and it's very convenient.

✓ there are a lot of people using them to commute to their jobs, and it's very convenient.

The verb 'using' needs an object; 'using for the commute' omits the object and uses an awkward preposition. Insert the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bikes' and use 'to commute' for purpose. Suggestion: always include the object of a transitive verb and ensure pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents.