自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition and fix grammatical errors (use past tense for childhood, "didn't have"; replace numerals with words; use articles). Also give a short reason or example to support your statement.

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I often borrowed my friend’s bike to try riding it, although I didn’t enjoy it much because I wasn’t good at balancing. For example, I usually fell over when trying to ride on uneven roads.

建議: Remove filler words and make sentences clearer. Begin with a direct response, then give two specific supporting points linked with a connector (for example/also). Use correct prepositions and articles (e.g., "from the Philippines", "near a main road"). Try to include a brief reason or comparison to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, I often see many cyclists on social media, and because my house is near a main road I regularly watch groups of bikers pass by. Also, cycling is common for commuting and exercise in my city.

× I don't have a bike since I was a child but my friend has 1 so I usually borrow so I can try and experience biking but I don't usually like bike because I'm not good at balancing.

✓ I haven't had a bike since I was a child, but my friend has one, so I usually borrow his to try and experience biking; however, I don't usually like biking because I'm not good at balancing.

The original mixes present simple 'I don't have' with a time reference 'since I was a child', which requires present perfect ('haven't had'). Use 'one' instead of '1' and specify 'his' for the friend's bike. Also change 'like bike' to 'like biking' (verb+ing). Use punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions or states continuing from the past to present, use words instead of digits in casual sentences, and use gerund after 'like'. Problems matched: Present tense issue (ID 6), Verb + -ing form (ID 8), Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× Uh, yeah. I think I've seen a lot of bikers on social media that from Philippines, and our house is near the main road, so I always saw many bikers passing here.

✓ Uh, yeah. I think I've seen a lot of bikers on social media from the Philippines, and because our house is near the main road, I often see many bikers passing by.

Remove the incorrect relative clause 'that from Philippines' and use the preposition 'from' directly with 'the Philippines'. Change 'I always saw' (simple past) to 'I often see' (present simple) to match the ongoing situation. Use 'passing by' as the correct phrasal verb. Suggestion: place prepositions directly with locations ('from the Philippines'), use appropriate tense for habitual actions ('see' not 'saw'), and use common phrasal verbs ('passing by'). Problems matched: Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11), Present tense issue (ID 6).