自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on clear grammar and coherent sequence. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct tense and simple linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so', 'but'). Keep it under five sentences and avoid repetition. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it to you, how you learned to ride, and a short outcome or feeling.

範例: Yes. I got a new bike from my parents when I was ten years old. At first I found it difficult to learn to ride, because I was afraid of falling, but I practiced every day for several weeks. Eventually I became confident and enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No or It depends), then add 1–2 concrete reasons or examples, using vocabulary like 'electric bike', 'convenient', 'commute', and proper grammar. Avoid filler sounds and unfinished phrases. Keep to three or four sentences maximum.

範例: It depends, but bikes and especially electric bikes are quite common in China. Many people prefer cars for long trips because they are more comfortable, but commuters often use electric bikes because they are cheap and save time in traffic. For short journeys in cities, electric bikes are a practical and popular choice.

× Yes, I have a back when I were killed because my buy buy a new bike when I 10 years old and they want to me study it how to read it and I but I feel it's difficult for me. I I study it for a long time and I didn't I didn't successful reading.

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my parents bought me a new bike when I was 10 years old and they wanted me to learn how to ride it, but I felt it was difficult for me. I practiced for a long time, but I was not successful in learning to ride.'

This sentence contains multiple errors; primary issues involve incorrect verb forms (past participle and past simple) and incorrect auxiliary usage. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child.' 'Were' should be 'was' for first person singular past. 'Buy' should be past 'bought.' 'Want' should be past 'wanted.' 'Study it how to read it' is wrong verb choice and order; 'learn how to ride it' is correct. 'I study' should be past 'I practiced' or 'I studied' depending on meaning; consistent past tense is required. Use 'was not successful in learning to ride' instead of 'didn't successful reading.' Suggestion: keep verbs in past simple for past events and use correct past participles where needed, and choose appropriate verbs (learn/ride/practice).

× Well, umm, in fact, many people prefer to driving a car in China and because they think the car is more convenient and or they will choose electric back.

✓ 'Well, um, in fact, many people prefer driving a car in China because they think a car is more convenient, or they choose electric bikes.'

Errors include incorrect use of infinitive after 'prefer' — use 'prefer driving' or 'prefer to drive.' 'Prefer to driving' is ungrammatical. 'They will choose' can be simplified to 'they choose' for general statements; maintain simple present for habitual facts. 'Electric back' is a mispronunciation/typo; correct word is 'bike' or 'bikes.' Also article use: 'a car' for a general singular instance. Suggestion: use 'prefer' + gerund for habits and use simple present for general facts; correct nouns ('bike').

× It will save your energy when you go to work, work or.

✓ 'It saves energy when you go to work.'

The phrase 'save your energy' is awkward in this context; native speakers say 'save time' or 'save energy' without 'your' in this general statement. Also tense should be simple present for general truths: 'it saves.' The repetition 'work, work or' is extraneous and should be removed. Suggestion: use concise simple-present statements for habitual/general facts and avoid redundant words.