自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамотно: избегайте лишних слов (например, «uh» и повторов «I remember»), исправьте порядок слов («bought me it» → «bought it for me»), добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных предложения по связке с помощью союзов (например, "because" или "so"). Также следите за длиной — не более 4–5 предложений. Пример плана: 1) прямая тема, 2) источник/время, 3) конкретная деталь о дизайне, 4) краткий эффект/эмоция.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was the first bike my grandparents bought for me about ten years ago, and it had a design from my favorite cartoon, which made me very proud. Because of that design, I always wanted to ride it to show my friends. It helped me learn to balance and gave me confidence to ride longer distances.

建議: Сделайте ответ более чётким и связным: начните с прямого утверждения о популярности, затем поясните причину с использованием связок (например, "because", "so", "however"). Избегайте неясных фраз вроде «but since no» — вместо этого выразите противоположность или ограничение. Добавьте конкретный пример или контраст (например, про город/село или про транспортные альтернативы).

範例: I think bikes are somewhat popular in my country. For example, many parents buy bikes for children aged six or seven to teach them how to ride, so cycling is common among youngsters. However, in cities adults prefer public transport and cars, so adult cycling is less widespread than among children.

× It was my first bike and uh, my grandparents bought me it.

✓ It was my first bike, and my grandparents bought it for me.

The original sentence uses the incorrect pronoun order 'bought me it'. In English, the correct indirect and direct object order is either 'bought it for me' or 'bought me a bike'. Use 'bought it for me' when referring back to 'my first bike'. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity.

× I remember it was like 10 years ago, but I remember that that bike because there was a design from my favorite cartoon.

✓ I remember it was about 10 years ago, and I remember that bike because it had a design from my favorite cartoon.

Multiple problems: 'like' as a filler is informal; use 'about' for approximate time. The clause 'I remember that that bike' is awkward; use 'I remember that bike'. The phrase 'there was a design from my favorite cartoon' is incorrect; use past tense 'it had a design' to match 'was about 10 years ago'. Ensure consistent past tense when describing past events.

× I believe that in our country there is a tendency to buy a bike for a six or seven-year old guy or girl to teach them how to ride it, but since no.

✓ I believe that in our country there is a tendency to buy a bike for six- or seven-year-old children to teach them how to ride, but not anymore.

Problems: 'six or seven-year old' needs hyphenation and a noun ('children') rather than 'guy or girl' for neutrality. 'to teach them how to ride it'—omit final 'it' or use 'ride it' but 'ride' alone is natural. The ending 'but since no' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'but not anymore' to indicate the tendency has decreased. Use consistent structure and clearer wording.