自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “when I was a child” and “when I was young” mean the same). Also aim for varied vocabulary and a smoother rhythm.

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bright red bike when I was about seven, and I rode it to visit friends every afternoon.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear, specific reasons linked with connectors. Correct grammar (use plural/singular and prepositions), avoid filler phrases like “like,” and be more precise about who uses bikes and why.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. For example, many people use them to commute to work because they are cheap and convenient, and in mountain regions cycling is a common leisure activity among locals.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses the auxiliary 'did' with the past simple affirmative 'have', which is unnecessary. In past simple affirmative statements, use the past form of the verb without 'did'. Use 'I had' instead of 'I did have' for natural past-tense expression. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for simple past affirmative sentences.

× My mother bought it for me when I was young.

✓ My mother bought it for me when I was young.

This sentence is correct. The past simple 'bought' correctly matches the time reference 'when I was young'. No change needed.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because people use it for going to their job as a hobby and we also live in like a mountain area which people bike a lot there.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because people use them to go to work and as a hobby, and we also live in a mountainous area where many people cycle.

Multiple issues: 'people use it' is incorrect pronoun number and should be 'use them' (plural agreement). 'going to their job' is awkward; use 'go to work'. 'as a hobby' should be parallel with 'to go to work', so 'and as a hobby' works. 'we also live in like a mountain area' is informal and ungrammatical; 'a mountainous area' is appropriate. 'which people bike a lot there' is redundant and ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'where many people cycle'. Suggestions: match pronouns to their antecedents, use standard collocations ('go to work'), avoid filler words like 'like', and use 'cycle' or 'ride bikes' instead of 'bike' as a verb when more natural.