自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency and add a brief topic sentence with one supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). For example, begin with a clear statement like “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child,” then give a reason and a short consequence or feeling. Link the reason with a connector such as “because” or “so.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. As a result, I often walked to school or took public transport, which made me quite independent.

建議: Work on fluency and clarity: use plural/singular correctly, remove fillers and repetitions, and organize ideas with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Provide one or two specific supporting details such as reasons and an example to make the answer more concrete. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., “common,” “affordable,” “primary mode of transport”).

範例: Yes, bicycles are very common in my country because many people find them more affordable than motorcycles or cars. For example, in rural areas families often rely on bikes for daily errands and commuting to nearby schools or markets.

× No, I don't have because my parents cannot afford a new bike.

✓ No, I didn't have one because my parents couldn't afford a new bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'I don't have' is present tense and incorrect here; use 'I didn't have'. Also include the object 'one' to avoid ambiguity. Use the contracted past form 'couldn't' to match the past context and natural speech. Suggestion: Use past simple for past situations (I didn't have, my parents couldn't afford).

× Yes, a bike is very popular to our country because most of the people in the, in our country cannot afford to buy motorcycles and car.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because most people in our country cannot afford to buy motorcycles or cars.

The speaker mixes singular and plural: 'a bike is very popular to our country' is unnatural. Use plural 'bikes are' to refer to bikes generally. Preposition 'in' is correct for location ('in our country'), not 'to'. 'Most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is natural. Parallel nouns require plural: 'motorcycles or cars'. Suggestion: Use plural when speaking about things in general (bikes are), use 'in' for location, and keep parallel plural nouns (motorcycles or cars).

× So that the uh, the only, the only thing that they have to uh, they are to, can afford to buy is only a bike.

✓ So the only thing they can afford to buy is a bike.

The original sentence has redundant and disfluent phrases ('the uh, the only, the only thing', 'they have to uh, they are to, can afford') causing sentence structure errors. Simplify to a clear subject-verb-object order: 'the only thing they can afford to buy is a bike.' Remove extra fillers and duplicate phrases. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and follow subject + modal/verb + object (they can afford to buy a bike).