自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more specific and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concrete details (when, what kind of bike, a brief memory). Use a linking word if you add another sentence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought me when I was six. I practiced riding it every weekend in the park, and my father would run alongside me until I learned to balance.

建議: Improve clarity and coherence: give a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitations and correct pronoun use (use "their" or "people's" not "your"). Use linking words (for example, however, because) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular, especially among students and people living in cities. However, more adults prefer driving or taking trains because urban regulations now restrict where bikes can be ridden and public transport is fast and convenient.

× I had a bike and I practiced it with my parents.

✓ I had a bike and I practiced riding it with my parents.

The verb 'practice' requires a gerund (verb + -ing) when followed by another verb as its object. 'Practice it' is unclear because 'it' refers to the bike; the correct form is 'practice riding it' to show the activity performed on the bike. Suggestion: use 'practice' + verb-ing (e.g., 'practiced riding').

× Yes, I think many people, especially young people use bikes, but I think more people want to drive your car or take a train because it is, uh, the, the regulation is more strict than in the past.

✓ Yes, I think many people, especially young people, use bikes, but I think more people want to drive their cars or take a train because the regulations are stricter than in the past.

Multiple problems fall under third person singular and article/word choice categories. 'Young people use' needs a comma after 'young people' for clarity (punctuation), and 'drive your car' is incorrect pronoun choice; it should be 'their cars' to refer generally to people. 'The regulation is more strict' is unidiomatic: 'regulations are stricter' uses plural and comparative adjective form 'stricter'. Use 'stricter' (comparative) not 'more strict'. Also keep consistent plural 'cars' and 'regulations'. Suggestion: use appropriate pronouns for general statements ('their') and use comparative adjective form and plural nouns when speaking generally.