自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy, fluency and vocabulary. Use correct verbs (ride, not route), avoid run-on sentence, add a brief specific detail and linking word. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and natural phrasing.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day. This gave me a sense of independence and helped me stay fit because I cycled about 20 minutes each way.

建議: Reduce repetition and clarify idea with specific examples and linking words. Correct grammar (bikes are plural; say “they are popular”) and give concrete groups and a brief reason. Stay within 2–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan. For example, many high school and junior high students cycle to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. In addition, cities often have bike lanes, which makes cycling safer and more common.

× I usually route it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day which helped me feel independent and keep fit.

✓ I usually rode it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day, which helped me feel independent and keep fit.

The original uses 'route' which is incorrect verb choice; the correct verb for riding a bike is 'ride' and because the context is past ('when I was a child') the past tense 'rode' is required. Also a comma is needed before 'which' to join the relative clause. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'ride a bike' and match tense to the time frame (past simple -> rode).

× Yes, it's it's definitely popular in Japan because everyone, everything, most of the students are like high school students.

✓ Yes, bikes are definitely popular in Japan because most students, such as high school and junior high school students, use them.

The original has repetition ('it's it's'), unclear noun references ('everyone, everything'), and poor sentence structure. 'It's' is ambiguous and unnecessary; 'bikes are' is clearer. Use 'students' not vague 'everyone/everything' and replace 'are like high school students' with a clear category. Also 'use them' refers back to bikes. Suggestion: remove repetitions, specify the subject, and keep parallel structure.

× Junior high school students use use bikes to go to the school and and.

✓ Junior high school students use bikes to go to school and around their neighborhoods.

This sentence contains repetition ('use use', 'and and') and an incomplete phrase ('to the school and and'). Also 'go to school' does not need the definite article 'the' in general statements. Improve by removing duplicates, completing the parallel idea, and using appropriate articles: 'go to school' and 'around their neighborhoods'. Suggestion: proofread to eliminate repeated words and ensure the sentence is complete and idiomatic.