自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more precise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrasing, and add one or two brief supporting details linked logically. Use correct tense and article use (e.g., “a bike” not “it”) and improve flow with a linking phrase.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my father thought it was unsafe. However, I started cycling in my early teens after he agreed, and I used a simple second-hand bike to commute to school.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific supporting details using linking words. Expand slightly with reasons or examples and use plural agreement and comparative phrasing for clarity (e.g., “they cost less”).

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. For instance, many people use bicycles for short trips and commuting because they are cheaper than cars and easier to park, especially in crowded cities.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had it on my teenage years.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had one during my teenage years.

The second sentence uses 'had it on my teenage years' which is incorrect. Use 'had one' to avoid referring to 'bike' with 'it' after negation; 'it' is ambiguous here. Also use 'during my teenage years' (preposition and plural noun) not 'on my teenage years'. This fixes the past tense and preposition usage and makes the sentence natural.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had it on my teenage years.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had one during my teenage years.

Using 'it' to refer to 'a bike' after saying you didn't have one is confusing; 'one' is the correct pronoun to replace 'a bike'. Also 'on my teenage years' should be 'during my teenage years'. Use 'one' for countable nouns and 'during' for periods of time.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had it on my teenage years.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My father was against it, so I had one during my teenage years.

The phrase 'on my teenage years' is incorrect. For periods like 'teenage years' use the preposition 'during' or say 'in my teens'. Change 'on' to 'during' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in the Philippines because it costs less than cars.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in the Philippines because they cost less than cars.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'bikes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'cost' should match plural subject. Using 'it costs' is incorrect for plural noun 'bikes'.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in the Philippines because it costs less than cars.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in the Philippines because they cost less than cars.

The original sentence uses singular verb 'costs' with plural subject 'bikes' and singular pronoun 'it'. Change to 'they cost' so pronoun and verb agree with the plural noun 'bikes'.