自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fragments and unclear phrases. Use linking words if you add details (for example, because, so, when). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was eleven years old because my parents wanted me to be more independent. It was a blue mountain bike and I used it every day to ride to my friends’ houses and to the nearby park.

建議: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and logical supporting details. Use linking words (however, because, therefore) and avoid filler sounds (uh). Be specific about timelines and reasons and keep responses concise (max five sentences).

範例: Yes, bikes have been popular in my country for many years. However, their use declined over the last decade because more people bought cars and motorcycles. Recently, bike use is rising again, especially among young people who choose cycling for fitness and short commutes.

× I was 11 years old and.

✓ I was 11 years old.

The original sentence ends with an extra conjunction 'and' that creates a sentence fragment (sentence structure error). Remove 'and' to form a complete sentence. If you intended to add more information, connect it with a clause, e.g. 'I was 11 years old and I had a bike.'

× Local average was my favorite till now.

✓ The local area was my favorite until now.

The phrase 'Local average' is incorrect and likely a mistaken word choice (incorrect adjective/noun use). 'Local area' fits the meaning. Also 'till now' should be 'until now' for formality. If meaning is that the place remained favorite up to the present, use 'has been my favorite until now.'

× Yes, I think bikes were popular but uh, in the last decade, uh, they are gradually lost their popularity.

✓ Yes, I think bikes were popular in the past, but in the last decade they have gradually lost their popularity.

Mixing past simple 'were popular' with present passive 'are lost' is inconsistent (tense issue). Use present perfect 'have lost' to describe a change continuing to the present. Also remove filler words 'uh' for clarity.

× But now I think they are as the younger generation is more into fitness, they are more opting for bikes rather than using cars or motorcycles for the mode of transport.

✓ Now I think they are becoming popular again, as the younger generation is more into fitness and is choosing bikes over cars or motorcycles for transport.

The original sentence is awkward and contains a run-on structure and unclear connectors (sentence structure errors). Reorder clauses: state the main idea ('becoming popular again'), use 'as' to introduce reason, and use 'choosing' or 'is choosing' for clarity. 'Opting for bikes' is acceptable, but 'for the mode of transport' is redundant; use 'for transport.' Also maintain subject-verb agreement ('the younger generation is').