自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammatical slips (e.g. "I did not have a bike" once is enough) and replace vague phrases like "failed" with a brief explanation of what happened.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because I was afraid of falling. My brother owned one and my father encouraged me to learn, so I tried riding once or twice, but I couldn't balance and kept falling, which put me off continuing.

建議: Good content and clear opinion. Remove fillers like "uh" and use more precise linking words. Add one concrete example or brief statistic to make the answer more specific and convincing.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because dedicated bike lanes and government campaigns promote cycling. For example, several cities offer rental-bike apps with hundreds of bikes available, which makes short trips and commuting by bike much easier.

× No, I did not have a. No, I did not have a bike because I've always been scared of falling so I never tried to ride a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike because I was always scared of falling, so I never tried to ride one.

The original contains a fragment ('No, I did not have a.') and mixes present perfect ('I've always been scared') with a past context. Use a single complete sentence and past tense ('was always scared') to match the time frame 'when you were a child'. Also replace the second 'bike' with the pronoun 'one' to avoid repetition and improve cohesion.

× However, my brother did own one and my dad wanted me to practice and learn how to ride a bike.

✓ However, my brother owned one, and my dad wanted me to practise and learn how to ride it.

Using 'did own' is grammatically correct but sounds emphatic/unnecessary; simple past 'owned' is more natural for a past narrative. Maintain past tense 'wanted'. Use 'it' to refer back to the bike for cohesion. Note: 'practise' (British) or 'practice' (American) spelling can be chosen consistently.

× So I tried once or twice but I failed.

✓ So I tried once or twice, but I couldn't succeed.

The original is grammatical but 'I failed' is blunt; in context it's better to use a past ability/result structure like 'I couldn't succeed' or 'I failed to learn'. Keep past tense consistent and add a comma before 'but'.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because we have different uh, specific lanes for bikes and it is very encouraged.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because we have specific bike lanes and cycling is strongly encouraged.

'Different uh, specific lanes for bikes' is redundant and disfluent. Replace with 'specific bike lanes'. 'It is very encouraged' is incorrect because 'encourage' needs an agent or a gerund phrase; use 'cycling is strongly encouraged' to correctly express that the activity is promoted. 'Strongly' is a clearer adverb than 'very' here.

× Uh, we have different applications that uh, provide rental bikes and overall it's easier to travel by bike.

✓ We have apps that provide rental bikes, and overall it's easier to travel by bike.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'different'. 'Applications' is better as 'apps' in spoken English. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; this correction improves clarity and concision while preserving meaning.