自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, but it can be improved by using a concise topic sentence, avoiding small grammar issues, and adding one specific supporting detail with a linking word. For example, start with a simple statement about having a bike, then briefly add a reason or memorable detail. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did — I had a pink bike from about age five to ten. Later I switched to a blue bike because I needed a bigger frame as I grew. I remember riding it to the park every weekend, which helped me learn to balance quickly.

建議: Your response gives an opinion but is unclear in places and contains some grammar errors. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence stating your view, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Avoid vague phrases like 'a lot of health' — instead explain what you mean (e.g., people value walking or public transport).

範例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my city. For one thing, Istanbul is close to the sea and many people prefer walking along the waterfront for exercise. Also, public transport is convenient, so most people take buses or trams rather than cycling.

× Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child from ages 5 to 10.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child from age 5 to 10.

Use 'age 5 to 10' or 'ages 5 to 10' both can appear, but 'from ages 5 to 10' is awkward; 'from age 5 to 10' is clearer. This is a style/tense-related clarity improvement; the past tense 'had' is correct so keep past tense but improve phrase for naturalness.

× Then I changed to a new bike which was blue.

✓ Then I switched to a new bike that was blue.

The verb 'change' without an object is awkward in this context; in past narrative use 'switched to' or 'got' to indicate changing bikes. 'That' is preferred for restrictive clauses about things. The tense remains past, so use 'switched' to be natural.

× In my opinion, no, because we have a lot of health.

✓ In my opinion, no, because many people are healthy.

'We have a lot of health' is ungrammatical and unnatural in English; 'health' is an uncountable noun and you cannot 'have a lot of health' to mean 'many healthy people.' Rephrase to 'many people are healthy' to convey the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and meaning.

× I live in Istanbul which is near seaside so people usually prefer walking or just taking the bus.

✓ I live in Istanbul, which is near the seaside, so people usually prefer walking or taking the bus.

Use commas with the non-restrictive clause 'which is near the seaside.' Use the article 'the' before 'seaside.' Remove 'just' as it is optional; keep parallel verb forms 'walking or taking.' This corrects preposition/article use and improves sentence flow.