自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations, repetitions, and incorrect words (for example, 'smile' should be 'small'). Keep your answer to no more than 4–5 sentences and use varied simple vocabulary (e.g., 'commute' or 'ride').

範例: Yes, I did. I got a bike from my parents for my tenth birthday because I often walked to school and was usually late. After I received it, I used to ride to school every day, which saved me time and helped me attend all my classes.

建議: Make a direct statement then give two clear reasons with linking words; avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use precise vocabulary (for example, 'affordable', 'practical', 'commute', 'congested') and provide a specific example or consequence to support your point. Keep it to 3–4 sentences and ensure grammatical correctness.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. Moreover, with heavy traffic in many cities, many people choose bikes to avoid delays. For example, my colleague saves at least 20 minutes each day by cycling to work.

× Hi, uh, I did have a bike when I was a smile, so I was small.

✓ Hi, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The student used the incorrect word 'smile' instead of 'child', which is a word choice error and causes the sentence to be ungrammatical. Replace with 'child' to convey the intended meaning. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: practice using the correct noun for age references and reduce fillers.

× I used to go to school by foot and then I used to always reach very late at the school and I was missing some classes.

✓ I used to walk to school and I always arrived very late to school and missed some classes.

'Go to school by foot' is not idiomatic; use 'walk to school' (verb choice). 'Used to always reach' mixes 'used to' with adverb placement awkwardly; use simple past habitual 'I always arrived' or 'I used to arrive'. 'Arrived very late to school' is more natural than 'reach very late at the school'. 'Was missing some classes' should be 'missed some classes' to indicate completed habitual action. Suggestion: use idiomatic verbs (walk) and keep consistent past habit/forms.

× So my parents decided to give me a bike on my birthday.

✓ So my parents decided to give me a bike for my birthday.

Use 'for my birthday' rather than 'on my birthday' when describing a gift given in relation to the occasion. 'On my birthday' can be used but 'for my birthday' is more idiomatic for gifts. Suggestion: learn common collocations with 'birthday' and 'give'.

× So that's why, uh, I got a bike, uh, on my birthday and uh, I used to go to school by bike.

✓ So I got a bike for my birthday and I used to ride it to school.

'Go to school by bike' is understandable but 'ride it to school' is more natural. Remove filler 'uh' and avoid redundant phrasing 'that's why' then 'I got'. Use 'ride' for bicycle use. Suggestion: prefer active verbs like 'ride' and reduce filler words.

× Uh, yes. I do think the bikes are very popular in my country, uh, not only because it's easy to buy, but other things, it's quite, uh, easy to travel to workplaces nowadays.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, not only because they are easy to buy, but also because it is quite easy to travel to workplaces nowadays.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'bikes' when speaking generally; use 'bikes'. 'It's easy to buy' should refer to 'they are easy to buy' (plural agreement). 'But other things' is incorrect; use 'but also because' to connect reasons. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural pronouns and use correct connectors ('not only... but also').

× We're finding the traffic, which is quite heavy and the people are not uh, reaching time, uh, reaching on time to the workplaces.

✓ The traffic is quite heavy and people are not arriving at workplaces on time.

'We're finding the traffic' is awkward; use 'The traffic is quite heavy'. 'Reaching time' is incorrect collocation; use 'arriving on time'. 'To the workplaces' is wordy; use 'at workplaces' or 'to work'. Suggestion: use standard collocations ('traffic is heavy', 'arrive on time', 'go to work').

× So, umm, the people, most uh, of umm, people are, uh.

✓ So most people are using bikes to commute.

Original is an incomplete sentence with fillers and no clear verb. Provide a complete clause that follows context: reason people use bikes. Suggestion: avoid excessive fillers and ensure each sentence has subject and verb; practice forming concise completions.