自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 대한 직접적인 대답은 했으나 문법 오류와 불필요한 반복이 있습니다. 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 예를 들어 ‘I didn't because...’ 뒤에 정확한 이유(예: 부모님이 허락하지 않으셨다, 위험하다고 생각했다)를 덧붙이고, 감정 표현도 구체적으로 바꾸세요. 또한 불필요한 단어(예: 'I when I was younger')를 제거해 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wanted to learn to ride, but my parents didn’t allow it because they thought it was unsafe. As a result, I felt quite fearful and didn’t try to ride until I was older.

建議: 대답은 긍정적이며 요지를 전달하지만 비언어적 소음(맴맴, 'umm')과 반복('in in')이 있고 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 직답 후 구체적 근거(예: 자전거 도로, 출퇴근 이용률, 전기자전거 증가 등)를 연결어(with, because, for example)를 사용해 설명하세요. 문장을 2~3개로 구성해 명확하게 표현하면 더 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Korea. Many people use bicycles for commuting because cities have extensive bike lanes and renting systems. For example, electric bikes have become common for short trips to work or school.

× I really wanted to learn about riding a bike, but I didn't do it because I when I was younger.

✓ I really wanted to learn to ride a bike, but I didn't because I was scared when I was younger.

The original sentence has a broken structure and missing words. Use 'learn to ride' or 'learn how to ride' rather than 'learn about riding'. 'I didn't do it because I when I was younger' is missing the reason and verb; replace with 'I was scared when I was younger' to complete the clause. Also remove the extra 'do it' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I feel really scared about it.

✓ I felt really scared about it.

The question asks about being a child (past), so the verb tense should be past simple 'felt' instead of present 'feel'. Use past tense to match the time frame. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× In Korea many people ride a bike when they go work or umm, take a work.

✓ In Korea many people ride bikes when they go to work or commute.

Use 'go to work' (preposition 'to' required) and 'ride bikes' (plural for general statement). 'Take a work' is incorrect; use 'commute' or 'take public transport'. Also remove filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So bikes are popular in in my country.

✓ So bicycles are popular in my country.

Double 'in' should be removed. 'Bikes' is acceptable, but using 'bicycles' is slightly more formal. Ensure no duplicate prepositions and maintain plural for general plural subject. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the past time frame, so no change is needed. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

This is the examiner's question and is already correct; no correction required. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yeah. MMM. In Korea many people ride a bike when they go work or umm, take a work.

✓ Yes. In Korea many people ride bikes when they go to work or commute.

Replace informal fillers 'MMM' and 'umm' with 'Yes' and fix preposition 'go to work' and the phrase 'take a work' to 'commute'. Also use 'ride bikes' for a general statement. Grammar problem type ID: 26