自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronoun errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly and avoid redundancy. Keep to under 5 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My parents thought bikes were only for boys, so they didn’t buy one for me. As a result, I walked to school every day, which usually took about 20 minutes.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity, use accurate linking phrases, and provide a specific example with correct tense. Use varied vocabulary (convenient, economical, fast) and correct word order. Keep answers coherent and no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and save time on short commutes. For example, when I go to college I often see many students and workers cycling in the morning to avoid traffic congestion. They also save money on transport and are better for fitness.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents believed that bikes are only for boys, so that she could not buy any bike for me.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents believed that bikes were only for boys, so they could not buy a bike for me.

The sentence uses the pronoun 'she' incorrectly to refer to 'my parents' (plural); use 'they'. Also 'so that' is unnecessary and awkward here; replace with 'so'. Additionally, maintain tense consistency: 'believed' suggests past, so 'are' should be 'were'. Use 'a bike' rather than 'any bike' for a single item in this context.

× Instead I walked to go school every day.

✓ Instead, I walked to school every day.

The verb phrase 'walked to go school' is ungrammatical. Use 'walked to school' to express habitual past action. Also add a comma after 'Instead' for clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and health people safe time on their daily commute.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and help people save time on their daily commute.

The original misuses 'health' and 'safe' where verbs are required. Replace with 'help' (verb) and 'save' (verb). 'People' is correct as the object; word order should be 'help people save time'.

× For example, when I go to college, I saw many students or worker use bike especially in morning avoid traffic congestion.

✓ For example, when I go to college, I see many students and workers using bikes, especially in the morning, to avoid traffic congestion.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I go' is present so use 'see' (present) instead of 'saw' (past). Use plural 'workers' and plural 'bikes'. Correct verb form 'using' (verb + -ing) to show action in progress. Include articles and prepositions: 'in the morning' and 'to avoid traffic congestion'. Also replace 'or' with 'and' for listing.