自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect possessive forms. Also correct verb tenses and word order (e.g., “one of my close friends,” “at that time,” “I learned to ride”).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, one of my close friends had his father’s bike, and I often borrowed it to practice. As a result, I learned to ride by spending afternoons with him in our neighborhood.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a clear reason and a specific example or consequence using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”). Vary vocabulary slightly (use “motorbikes,” “scooters,” “congestion”) and avoid repeating the same phrase (“traffic jam”).

範例: Yes, bikes and motorbikes are very popular in my country because they help people avoid heavy traffic. For example, many commuters choose scooters to travel quickly through congested streets, so they can save time and spend less on fuel.

× No, I didn't have a bike but my one of my close friend did have a bike that time which which was his father's and I used to ride that bike and I learned riding bike through that.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike, but one of my close friends had a bike then; it was his father's, and I used to ride it and learned to ride a bike that way.

Problems: redundant phrase 'my one of my close friend' and wrong singular/plural 'friend' and pronoun/reference issues. Also repetitive 'which which'. Corrections: use 'one of my close friends' (correct plural after 'one of'), replace 'did have a bike that time' with simple past 'had a bike then', combine clauses with punctuation, use 'it' to refer to the bike, and use 'learned to ride a bike' or 'learned to ride it'. Suggestion: ensure correct pronoun references, use 'one of' + plural noun, avoid redundant words, and use simple past for completed past events. Errors addressed: Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Singular and plural issue (ID 1) and Past tense issue (ID 5).

× Everybody wants to have a small vehicle or motorbike so that they can reach their destinations quickly and avoid the traffic jam.

✓ Everybody wants to have a small vehicle or motorbike so that they can reach their destination quickly and avoid traffic jams.

Problems: mismatch between singular 'everybody' treated with plural 'destinations' and use of definite article 'the' before 'traffic jam'. Corrections: use singular 'destination' to match 'everybody' as a singular indefinite pronoun, and pluralize 'traffic jams' or omit 'the' for general meaning. Suggestion: match number between indefinite pronouns and nouns (everybody + singular), and use plural for general phenomena (traffic jams) or omit articles when speaking generally. Errors addressed: Singular and plural issue (ID 1) and Incorrect use of the definite article (ID 17).