自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tenses and avoid contradictory phrasing (e.g., "didn't know how to use a bike until now" is confusing). Also fix grammar ("I wasn't already 18" → "I wasn't 18 yet"). Aim for natural phrasing and limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was about five or six. However, I didn't really learn to ride properly at that time, so I still feel a bit embarrassed about it. I'm planning to learn soon because I'll need a bike for university next year.

建議: Begin with a clear statement, then use linking words to compare and give a specific example. Avoid filler words like "but and" and use correct time expressions ("last summer"). Provide one concrete reason or observation to support your view.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Taiwan, especially in cities where they are convenient for short trips. However, when I visited Switzerland last summer, I noticed even more people cycling for commuting and leisure, probably because their cities are better adapted for cyclists.

× I did have a bike, but it was like when I was very small, like 5 or 6 years old, but I didn't know how to use a bike until now.

✓ I had a bike when I was very small, around 5 or 6 years old, but I didn't know how to ride it until later.

The original mixes past simple with 'did have' unnecessarily and uses 'until now' which incorrectly implies present relevance. Use simple past 'had' for possession in childhood and 'ride' is the correct verb for using a bicycle. 'Until later' correctly indicates learning happened after that time.

× But I would wish that I could quickly learn it just for my university 'cause I'm not already 18.

✓ But I wish I could learn quickly so I can ride to university because I'm not yet 18.

'Would wish' is incorrect; use simple 'wish' to express a desire. 'Could quickly learn it' is awkward—use 'learn quickly' and omit 'it' or replace with 'to ride'/'ride it'. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Not already 18' is wrong order; say 'not yet 18.'

× Yeah, I think bikes are quite popular for where I live in Taiwan, but and the last summer I went to Switzerland and I just found out that people there are the real bicycle users.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular where I live in Taiwan, but last summer when I went to Switzerland I discovered that people there are real bicycle users.

Remove 'for' before 'where I live' and avoid 'but and'—use a single conjunction. Use 'last summer' (no 'the') and 'discovered' or 'found out' in past simple to match the past visit. 'The real bicycle users' is unnatural; use 'real bicycle users' or 'keen cyclists.'