自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent, correct grammar and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense correctly, and add one specific supporting detail. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it, and mention a memory or how it helped you. Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences and use linking words like "and" or "so."

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was five; my grandfather bought it for me, and I remember learning to ride in our backyard. It really helped me become more independent and allowed me to visit friends nearby.

建議: Improve grammar (use plural 'bikes' and add articles), reduce hesitations, and give specific reasons with clear linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then support it with two clear reasons or an example. Avoid unclear words or phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and workers use them to travel short distances. For example, in small towns people often cycle to school or the market since it is cheap and convenient.

× My grandfather by, uh, bike for me.

✓ My grandfather bought a bike for me.

The student intended to describe a past action, so the correct past tense of 'buy' is 'bought'. The original sentence used 'by' which is a misspelling and not a verb form. Use 'bought' to indicate a completed action in the past. Also remove filler words like 'uh' for clarity.

× Bike is popular in my country because, uh students use a bike to go to school and. Call Aland.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because many students use bikes to go to school and commute around.

The student mixed singular and plural forms and created an unclear fragment. 'Bike is popular' should be plural 'Bikes are popular' to match the general statement. Use 'students' with 'many' and plural 'bikes' for consistency. The fragment 'and. Call Aland' is unclear; replace with a clear phrase such as 'and commute around' to convey purpose. Ensure subject and verb agree (plural subject with plural verb) and remove extraneous punctuation and fillers.