自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, use correct past tense, remove filler words, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Mention one or two specific memories to make the answer natural and engaging.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my younger brother to the nearby park, and sometimes we cycled to try different small restaurants on weekends. Those rides are one of my fondest childhood memories.

建議: Answer directly, use clear grammar and linking words, and give specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. State your opinion first, then give two clear reasons (e.g. traffic, availability of cars/public transport) using linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'.

範例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is mainly because city roads are very congested and unsafe for cyclists, and many people prefer cars or buses for comfort and convenience. For example, most families buy a car once they can afford it, so bicycles are usually used only by children.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child because, uh, uh, we were playing with my family as well as my friend and we go outside and uh, we go outside and buy to bike and explore new restaurants with my friend as well as.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because we played with my family and my friends, and we went outside to ride the bike and explore new places together.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses (saying 'I have' and 'we go' while referring to childhood). Use past tense for actions that happened in the past: 'had' (past of 'have'), 'played' (past of 'play'), 'went' (past of 'go'), and 'ride' fits context as infinitive 'to ride' or 'ride' after 'to'. Also removed filler words and corrected plural agreement ('my friends') and phrase 'explore new restaurants' to 'explore new places' for naturalness.

× No, I don't so think about, uh, bikes are not popular in our country with the passage of the time at, uh, my country, at the 12th country and uh, with the heavy traffic and, uh, high congestion rate. So I think the bikes are not popular, uh, so they can overcome with the passage of the times to the cars, automobiles as well as the buses and.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country. Over time, because of heavy traffic and high congestion, people prefer cars and buses to bicycles.

The original contains several errors: incorrect phrase 'I don't so think about' — should be 'I don't think' (remove extraneous words). 'Bikes are not popular in our country with the passage of the time' mixes awkward structure and tenses; use 'Over time' or 'Nowadays' and keep present simple for general truth: 'bikes are not popular'. 'At the 12th country' is unclear and removed. Subject-verb agreement and clarity improved by using simple clauses: 'people prefer cars and buses to bicycles.' Also removed redundant fillers and corrected word order for natural English.