自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammatical errors (e.g. say "Yes, I did" or "Yes, I had one"). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle from the age of six until I was ten. My father bought it for me, and I used to ride it around the neighbourhood every afternoon. I enjoyed racing my friends and exploring nearby parks, so it felt like my constant companion.

建議: Improve grammar, sentence flow and coherence. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, "because" or "also"). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. "inexpensive" instead of "less expensive") and avoid unclear phrases like "no more." Keep answers to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and practical for short-distance commuting. They are also widely used for exercise and leisure, and many people prefer them in crowded cities where traffic is a problem.

× Yes, I was. I had a bicycle when I was six years old which was brought by my father and I had used it until I was 10 years of age and it was a great companion for me at that time when I was, I used to ride around the neighborhood and we have great fun, fun with my friends.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was six years old; my father bought it for me, and I used it until I was ten. It was a great companion: I used to ride around the neighborhood and have a lot of fun with my friends.

Multiple issues: pronoun and tense misuse and awkward phrasing. 'Yes, I was' is incorrect to answer 'Did you have a bike'; use 'Yes, I had.' 'Which was brought by my father' is passive and unnatural here; use 'my father bought it for me.' Use simple past consistently ('I used it', 'I was ten') rather than past perfect 'I had used it' which is unnecessary. Remove redundant fragments ('when I was, I used to') and correct 'we have great fun, fun with my friends' to 'have a lot of fun with my friends.' Suggestions: answer direct yes/no with correct verb, prefer active voice, keep past tense consistent, and remove repetitions.

× Bicycle sale very popular in my country.

✓ Bicycle sales are very popular in my country.

Missing auxiliary and plural noun form. 'Sale' should be plural 'sales' when speaking generally, and the sentence needs the verb 'are' to be grammatical. Use subject-verb agreement: 'Bicycle sales are very popular.'

× People use them for different purposes, for commuting, for leisure right and for professional riders using and for exercise also they are using they are quite less expensive and no more.

✓ People use them for different purposes: commuting, leisure, professional riding, and exercise. They are quite inexpensive.

Multiple preposition and phrasing problems. Remove 'for' before gerunds when listing purposes ('commuting, leisure, professional riding, and exercise') and correct 'professional riders using' to 'professional riding.' 'Also they are using' is ungrammatical—restate as 'They are quite inexpensive.' 'Quite less expensive and no more' is awkward; use 'quite inexpensive' or 'less expensive than cars' if comparison intended. Suggestions: list items parallelly, use correct noun/gerund forms, and use concise comparative phrasing when needed.