自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I had a bike), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (e.g. “cycles” and “write” are wrong here). Use past simple and short phrases to explain why you didn’t ride it and who could have helped.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I never learned how to ride it because my parents were too busy to teach me, and there were no training wheels on the bike. As a result, I only watched other children ride and didn’t gain confidence to try it myself.

建議: Give a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover). Reduce hesitations and repetition, and use precise vocabulary (e.g. “common,” “commute,” “affordable,” “accessible”). Mention a brief example or comparison to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are an affordable way to commute, especially for students and low-income families. Secondly, in crowded cities people prefer bikes because they are faster for short trips and easier to park. For example, many teenagers I know cycle to school every day to avoid traffic.

× I did have a, uh, bike when I was a little girl, but I never got to ride it because it had only two cycles and I didn't understand how to write that.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a little girl, but I never got to ride it because it had only two wheels and I didn't understand how to ride it.

The sentence uses 'write' instead of the correct past participle 'ride' (or base verb 'ride' in this context). This is likely a lexical error rather than a true past participle form mistake, but the intended verb is 'ride'. Replace 'write' with 'ride'. Also 'two cycles' is incorrect for a bicycle; use 'two wheels'. Suggestion: focus on keeping the base verb 'ride' after modal/auxiliary constructions (here 'did' + base verb) and use correct noun 'wheels' for parts of a bicycle.

× And nobody taught me how to write this bicycle with only two cycles.

✓ And nobody taught me how to ride this bicycle with only two wheels.

Sentence contains wrong verb 'write' and wrong noun 'cycles'. The structure 'taught me how to [verb]' requires the base verb 'ride'. Use 'wheels' instead of 'cycles' for bicycle parts. Suggest practicing common verb collocations like 'ride a bicycle' and correct object nouns.

× Yes, I can say that bikes are really pop popular and it is used commonly, uh, for the teenagers that teenagers use it a lot, especially in the in the city where I live in, people travel a lot with with the bicycles because they're cheap, affordable and can get you to places which, umm cars cannot.

✓ Yes, I can say that bikes are really popular and are commonly used by teenagers. Especially in the city where I live, people travel a lot by bicycle because they are cheap, affordable and can get you to places that cars cannot.

Multiple problems: 'pop popular' is repetition/typo; 'it is used commonly, uh, for the teenagers that teenagers use it a lot' has pronoun and agreement issues and awkward structure; 'in the in the city where I live in' has redundant prepositions; 'with with the bicycles' duplicates words; 'they're cheap, affordable and can get you to places which, umm cars cannot' mixes pronoun reference and clause structure. Corrections: use 'are really popular' to agree with plural 'bikes'; use 'are commonly used by teenagers' (passive or 'teenagers use them' active); remove redundant 'in' and duplicate words; use 'by bicycle' or 'by bike' and 'they' to refer to bikes; use 'places that cars cannot' for correct comparative clause. Suggest practicing subject-verb agreement and reduced, clear clause structures, and proofreading to remove repetitions.