自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, plural/singular nouns, and choose precise words (e.g. "gave us a lift" instead of "throw me"). Avoid unnecessary or unclear words like "sale time" and "reuse fatigue."

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Usually my aunt gave my siblings and me a lift to school because it was far from home. Walking was possible sometimes, but it was tiring and took too long, so the car was much more convenient.

建議: Provide a clear, fluent statement and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g. "are very popular", "they rode to school on their own"). Use precise vocabulary ("affordable", "independent") and avoid short fragmented sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country and you can see them everywhere. For example, many children rode to school on their own because cycling is affordable and convenient, so it gives them more independence from their parents.

× I sometimes walk to school but usually my aunt throw me and my sibling to school every day which was more convenient and sale time because the school was quite far and reuse fatigue you as well.

✓ I sometimes walked to school, but usually my aunt drove me and my siblings to school every day, which was more convenient and saved time because the school was quite far and walking caused fatigue.

The sentence describes past habits, so verbs must be in the past tense (walked, drove). 'Throw' is incorrect for giving a ride; use 'drove'. 'Sibling' should be plural 'siblings' if referring to more than one. 'Sale time' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'saved time'. 'Reuse fatigue you as well' is ungrammatical; correct meaning is 'walking caused fatigue'. Suggestions: Keep all verbs consistent in past tense, choose correct verbs for meaning (drive for transporting), and use plural nouns when appropriate.

× In my country bicycles every popular and you can see them everywhere.

✓ In my country bicycles are very popular, and you can see them everywhere.

This sentence describes a present general fact, so use present simple 'are'. 'Every' is wrong here; the correct adverb is 'very' to modify 'popular'. Also add the verb 'are' to link subject and adjective. Suggestion: For present general statements, use present simple and the correct adverb (very) for emphasis.

× When I was a child, most boys and girls I called to school on their own because it was cheap and convenient.

✓ When I was a child, most boys and girls went to school on their own because it was cheap and convenient.

The phrase 'I called to school' is incorrect and breaks sentence structure. The intended meaning is that children traveled to school independently, so use 'went to school on their own'. Maintain past tense 'went' to match 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: Use correct phrasal verbs for common actions (go to school) and keep subject-verb clarity.

× And one more they didn't have to depend on their parent as well.

✓ Also, they didn't have to depend on their parents.

The singular noun 'parent' is inconsistent with 'they'; use plural 'parents'. 'And one more' is informal and awkward; use 'Also' or 'Moreover'. 'As well' is redundant after 'they didn't have to'; remove it. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun-noun number agreement and prefer concise linkers like 'also'.