自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm và sự rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi thì (used to/had), dùng từ đúng (bike thay vì buy), và cấu trúc câu nên ngắn gọn, trực tiếp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ (ai tặng, lúc nào, cảm xúc). Ví dụ chú ý sửa thì quá khứ: "I had a bike" hoặc "I used to have a bike"; tránh mệnh đề lộn xộn như "that's my parents was bad to me" — có thể nói "my parents bought it for me" hoặc "my parents were kind to me".

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I remember riding it every weekend in the park. It made me feel very happy and independent.

建議: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và mạch lạc: dùng linking words chính xác (because, however, although) và thì đúng. Tránh từ ngữ lặp và đệm (umm). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích với lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ hoặc so sánh ngắn. Chú ý ngữ pháp: "people usually go out by motorbike" và "people don't really use bicycles".

範例: In my country, bicycles are not very popular. Most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for daily travel, although some people still use bikes for exercise or short trips in parks.

× Yeah, of course I have a buy when I was a child that's my parents was bad to me.

✓ Yeah, of course I had a bike when I was a child. My parents were bad to me.

Error types: 5 (Past tense issue) and 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors). The student used present tense 'have' instead of past 'had' which is incorrect because the time frame 'when I was a child' is in the past. 'Buy' is a wrong word choice; the intended noun is 'bike'. Also, 'parents was' is incorrect subject-verb agreement: 'parents' is plural and requires 'were'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events (had, were) and use correct noun 'bike'.

× Actually in my country people usually go outside with motorbike and because it's very fast and convenient, but the bike umm, people not actually use it.

✓ Actually, in my country people usually go out on motorbikes because they are very fast and convenient, but people do not actually use bicycles.

Error types: 6 (Present tense issue) and 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 22 (Article errors). Issues: 'go outside with motorbike' is unnatural and uses wrong preposition and article; say 'go out on motorbikes'. 'It's very fast' mismatches plural subject 'motorbikes' so use 'they are'. 'but the bike umm, people not actually use it' has wrong article and negative construction; use 'but people do not actually use bicycles' and avoid unnecessary 'the' and filler. Suggestion: match plural subjects and verbs, use appropriate prepositions ('go out on'), and use 'do not' for present simple negatives.