自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense mistakes, and add one linked supporting detail with a reason or brief example. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct verb forms (couldn't/could not, I had trouble keeping my balance).

範例: No, I didn't. I couldn't ride a bike as a child because I had trouble keeping my balance, so my parents never bought one for me.

建議: Give a direct opinion first and then support it with a specific reason or example. Fix small errors ("write a bike" → "ride a bike") and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a concrete detail about why bikes are popular.

範例: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are popular in China because many people prefer eco-friendly and cheap transport; for example, my parents insisted I learn to ride so I could travel to school independently.

× No, I didn't, mainly because I cannot ride a bike when I was a child, you know, 'cause I think that it's very hard for me to ride a bike and I'm I have a problem in keeping balance. So yeah, this is the main reason why I don't.

✓ No, I didn't, mainly because I could not ride a bike when I was a child, you know, 'cause I thought it was very hard for me to ride a bike and I had a problem keeping my balance. So yeah, this was the main reason why I didn't.

The speaker mixes present tense ('cannot', 'think', 'have') with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense for actions and states in the past. Change 'cannot' to 'could not', 'think' to 'thought', 'have' to 'had', and 'is' to 'was'. Also use 'keeping my balance' (more natural) rather than 'in keeping balance'. These changes keep tense consistency and improve natural phrasing. Suggestions: Always match tense to the time reference; for past experiences use past forms (could, thought, had). Use possessive pronoun with 'balance' and prefer 'keeping my balance'.

× Umm yes of course. Umm, I still remember my parents told me you have to learn to write a bike because you know the eco friendly transport is very popular in China so you have to learn. My parents told me so.

✓ Umm, yes of course. Umm, I still remember my parents told me I had to learn to ride a bike because eco-friendly transport is very popular in China, so you have to learn it. My parents told me that.

The main errors are verb choice and tense. 'Write a bike' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ride'. Because the parents' advice refers to the past, use 'I had to' instead of 'you have to' in the reported memory. Also add hyphen to 'eco-friendly' and make the last clause natural: 'so you have to learn it' or 'so I had to learn'. 'My parents told me that' clarifies reported speech. Suggestions: Use the correct verb 'ride' for bicycles, keep tense consistent in reported memories, and use 'eco-friendly' as a compound adjective.