自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then give concise supporting details in 1–2 sentences using proper grammar and linking words. Correct factual/confusing parts (e.g., 'shy' → 'young'; clarify who taught you). Keep it under five sentences and avoid irrelevant fragments.

範例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about five, and he spent several weekends teaching me how to balance and pedal. Although I was a bit nervous at first, I learned quickly and enjoyed riding around the neighborhood.

建議: Answer directly and expand with specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'moreover'). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'help the environment', 'reduce CO2 emissions') and complete your comparative phrases. Provide one or two concrete examples or trends to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, bikes have become more popular in my country in recent years. This is mainly because people are trying to help the environment by reducing CO2 emissions, and because cycling is a cheap way to exercise. For example, many cities now have dedicated bike lanes and shared bike schemes, which makes cycling safer and more convenient.

× They asked when I was shy, when my dad brought to me and not to keep teaching me how to ride a bike.

✓ They asked when I was six, when my dad brought me a bike and taught me how to ride it.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word-choice problems: 'They asked when I was shy' is likely wrong word choice for an age; 'shy' should be a number (singular/plural and meaning error) — this is a sentence structure and word choice issue. 'brought to me' is an incorrect prepositional use; the correct object form is 'brought me a bike.' 'and not to keep teaching me how to ride a bike' is ungrammatical and unclear; context suggests past action of teaching, so use simple past 'taught me how to ride it.' Suggestions: state the age as a number (e.g., six), use direct object order 'brought me a bike,' and use consistent past tense 'taught me' to match 'brought.'

× I think it was when I was 15 years old.

✓ I think it was when I was 15 years old.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the past tense 'was' appropriately to refer to a past age. No change is needed.

× Well, nowadays they are more popular than they used to be.

✓ Well, nowadays bikes are more popular than they used to be.

The original sentence is mostly correct but omits the noun 'bikes,' which can cause ambiguity. Adding the noun clarifies the subject. The present tense 'are' and comparison with 'used to be' is appropriate for current trend contrasted with the past.

× I think because everyone wants to help the environmental, reducing CO2 emissions and also because of their health, they want to do more activities rather than.

✓ I think it's because people want to help the environment by reducing CO2 emissions, and they also want to improve their health, so they prefer to do more physical activities.

Multiple errors: 'the environmental' is incorrect noun/adjective use—should be 'the environment' (article and noun form error). 'Everyone' followed by 'their' is acceptable but 'people' is clearer here. 'Reducing CO2 emissions' needs a preposition 'by' to show purpose. 'Because of their health' is awkward; use 'to improve their health.' The phrase 'do more activities rather than' is incomplete and unclear; 'prefer to do more physical activities' completes the comparison. Suggestions: use correct noun 'environment,' include 'by' before gerund showing purpose, and complete comparative clause.