自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, concise answer first, then add one or two clear supporting reasons. Avoid unnecessary fillers and repetition. Use correct tense (past) and natural phrasing (don’t call the examiner “officer”). Be specific about the reason (e.g. safety concerns or license rules) and use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were worried about safety because there were many accidents in our area, so they decided not to buy one for me.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “riders are sorry.” Use linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example,” “so”) and provide concrete reasons such as cost, traffic or terrain.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park in crowded cities. For example, many commuters use motorcycles to save time during heavy traffic.

× No officer, I don't have a bike my parents didn't get me a bike to me uh, because of the accident uh and according to Nepal citizen uh, according to Nepal uh, the bikes and the license is.

✓ No, officer. I didn't have a bike when I was a child because of an accident, and according to Nepalese law, bicycles and licenses are regulated.

Grammar problem type IDs: 5 (Past tense issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 22 (Article errors), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns). The student mixed present and past tenses ('I don't have' vs 'didn't get') while describing a past situation; when speaking about childhood the past tense should be used consistently ('I didn't have'). The sentence is run-on and lacks punctuation; it needs to be split and reordered for clarity. 'my parents didn't get me a bike to me' is incorrect pronoun and word order; correct phrasing is 'my parents didn't get me a bike' or 'my parents didn't buy me a bike'. 'According to Nepal citizen' is wrong phrase and missing article/word choice; use 'according to Nepalese law' or 'according to the law in Nepal'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense, simplify and separate ideas with proper punctuation, replace incorrect pronouns and phrases, and use correct article/word choice for 'Nepalese law'.

× Bikes are very popular in my country because all the all the riders are sorry.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because many people ride them.

Grammar problem type IDs: 26 (Sentence structure errors), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns). The original sentence is repetitive ('all the all the') and ends with 'riders are sorry', which is semantically and grammatically incorrect. 'Riders are sorry' likely results from misuse of a word; the intended meaning is that many people ride bikes. To correct, remove repetition, use a quantifier ('many people') and a clear verb phrase ('ride them'). Ensure subject and verb agree and the object pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'bikes'.