自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Mention when you had it, how often you rode it, and a brief memory or reason. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle from ages six to twelve and I rode it almost every day after school. Because my neighborhood was small and safe, I often rode to my friend’s house or to the park. I especially remember learning to ride without training wheels with my mother helping me.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly and avoid repetition. Mention who uses bikes, typical purposes (commuting, shopping), and any evidence (traffic, bike parking).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short-distance commuting and shopping. For example, in cities it’s common to see bicycle lanes and crowded bike parking areas at train stations. Additionally, bikes are practical and inexpensive, which makes them a popular choice for students and office workers.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a childhood possession.

× Uh, I usually ride a bike because so I like bike.

✓ Uh, I usually rode a bike because I liked bikes.

The student is speaking about past habitual action (when they were a child), so verbs should be in the past habitual form. Change 'usually ride' to 'usually rode' and 'I like bike' to 'I liked bikes' (plural 'bikes' or add 'a bike') to match natural English. Also remove unnecessary filler 'so'. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in the past (usually + past verb) and plural or article with countable nouns.

× Call my mother ragged back.

✓ I called my mother to come back.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and unclear. It lacks a clear subject-verb-object structure and misuses words ('ragged back' is incorrect). The intended meaning seems to be that the student called their mother to come back or to fetch them. Use a proper past tense verb 'called' and an infinitive phrase 'to come back' or another appropriate verb. Suggestion: Always include a subject and a conjugated verb and choose correct verb phrases for the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think so because so many Japanese people ride the bike so for commuting.

✓ Yes, I think so because many Japanese people ride bikes for commuting.

This sentence has extra filler 'so' and incorrect article use 'the bike'. Use present simple 'ride' (correct) but 'bikes' should be plural for general reference. Remove redundant 'so'. Suggestion: For general statements use plural countable nouns without the definite article and avoid duplicate fillers.