自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer directly responds and includes a personal story, which is good. To improve: make sentences grammatically correct, avoid redundancy, and organize the story more clearly. Start with a clear topic sentence, follow with concise supporting details in chronological order, use linking words (for example, "when" or "so"), and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., say "when I got a good grade at school" and avoid filler like "UMM").

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. When I got a good grade at school in Morocco, my grandfather promised to buy me a pink bike, so he bought it for me. I remember riding it around my neighborhood and feeling very proud.

建議: This is a clear, relevant answer with supporting detail. To improve further: add a linking word to connect ideas, provide a bit more specific evidence or comparison (for example, mention where you saw them or who uses them), and vary vocabulary (use "commuting," "recreation," "cycling" instead of repeating "riding bikes"). Keep the response concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, in Morocco I often saw people cycling in parks and on coastal paths for recreation, while others used bikes for commuting to work or school.

× I still can remember when I've got a good grade and College in Morocco.

✓ I can still remember when I got a good grade at college in Morocco.

The original mixes present perfect contraction 'I've' incorrectly with a past time reference and misorders adverbs. Use simple past 'got' because the time is definite (when I got a good grade). Also place 'still' before the verb in this context and use 'college' in lowercase and 'at college' as the correct prepositional phrase.

× College is like middle school.

✓ College is like middle school.

The sentence itself is grammatical, but 'College' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Use lowercase 'college' to follow standard English capitalization rules. This is an article/capitalization style issue rather than a grammatical structure error.

× My grandfather UMM promised me to buy me a pink bike and he did and it was very good.

✓ My grandfather promised to buy me a pink bike, and he did; it was very nice.

The original contains an extra 'me' after 'promised' which is incorrect. The verb 'promise' is followed by an infinitive ('to buy') without repeating the indirect object. Also remove unclear 'UMM' filler. Improve sentence flow with a comma and a conjunction or semicolon, and replace vague 'very good' with 'very nice' for natural English.

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country.

The sentence is grammatically correct but can be improved stylistically by using 'bicycles' (more formal) instead of 'bikes'. Tense is appropriate (present simple) for general statements; no tense change is needed.

× When I was in Morocco, I used to see a lot of people riding bikes, either for sports or for hanging out and seeing nature.

✓ When I was in Morocco, I used to see a lot of people riding bicycles, either for sport or for hanging out and enjoying nature.

Use 'bicycles' for formality and 'for sport' (uncountable) rather than 'for sports' in this context. 'Seeing nature' is less natural than 'enjoying nature'. The gerund forms 'riding' and 'hanging' are correct; just choose more natural collocations.