自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (plural/singular and tense), reduce hesitation, and make the answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. For example, say "No, I didn’t" then add "because" or "because my parents were worried..." Avoid filler words like "umm."

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were worried I might get injured while riding, so they chose not to buy one for me. As a result, I often walked or took public transport to school.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and follow with specific supporting details and linking words. Correct grammar and complete the idea: use past reference appropriately and explain why popularity existed and whether it still continues. Add one or two specific examples or comparisons.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In the past, when Vietnam was poorer, many people relied on bicycles because they were affordable and fuel was expensive; even today many people still use bikes for short trips in cities and rural areas.

× No, I didn't have any bike when I was a child because my parent afraid that I could have umm problems with the bike.

✓ No, I didn't have any bikes when I was a child because my parents were afraid that I could have problems with a bike.

Errors: 'any bike' should be plural 'any bikes' or 'a bike' depending on meaning; 'my parent' should be plural 'my parents'; missing verb 'were' after 'parents' and incorrect adjective form 'afraid' needs a linking verb; 'could have umm problems with the bike' is awkward—use 'could have problems with a bike'. Suggestions: Use plural for countable nouns when referring generally (any bikes), ensure subject and verb agree (parents were), and choose the correct article ('a bike') for general mention.

× So they didn't buy me a bike when I was a child.

✓ So they didn't buy me a bike when I was a child.

Although the sentence is grammatically correct in past tense, it is repetitive given the previous clause. No tense change is needed. Suggestion: To avoid repetition, merge sentences: 'No, I didn't have any bikes when I was a child because my parents were afraid I might have problems with a bike, so they didn't buy me one.'

× Yes, bikes are loved by most of the people in my country because back to the past, Vietnam was a very poor so the people.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular with most people in my country because in the past Vietnam was very poor, so many people could not afford them.

Multiple problems: 'bikes are loved by most of the people' is awkward—use 'bicycles are popular with most people'; 'because back to the past' is incorrect phrase order and preposition use—use 'in the past'; 'Vietnam was a very poor so the people' is incomplete and ungrammatical—need adjective 'poor' without article and a complete clause explaining consequence. Suggestions: Use natural collocations ('popular with'), correct time expressions ('in the past'), and complete cause-effect clauses ('so many people could not afford them').