自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally natural and gives good personal detail, but there are small grammatical errors and a confusing phrase (“So what are 6 children?”). Make the response more concise (max 5 sentences), correct tense/number errors, and use one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details with linking words. For example, remove unclear fragments, correct “each and everyone of us” to “each of us,” and avoid filler phrases like “So yeah.”

範例: Yes. I had a bike throughout my childhood because my father is keen on fitness. Consequently, each of the six children in our family owned a bike, and we often rode together early in the morning for 30 to 60 minutes. This routine helped us stay active and close as siblings.

建議: The answer addresses the question directly and gives a reason, which is good. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., “because,” “therefore”), correct article and plurality errors (“the majority,” “people prioritize”), and give a brief specific example or comparison to strengthen the point. Keep it within 5 sentences and avoid overgeneralization without evidence.

範例: I don't think cycling is very popular in my country because the majority of people prioritize convenience and basic needs over fitness. Therefore, cities rarely have dedicated bike lanes, and most people prefer motorbikes or cars for short trips. For instance, in my city you can see crowded streets but very few cyclists during rush hour.

× Yes, I've had a bike for as long as I can remember, especially since my dad loves fitness.

✓ Yes, I had a bike for as long as I can remember, especially because my dad loved fitness.

The student used present perfect 'I've had' together with 'when you were a child' context; reference to childhood should use past tense for consistency. Also 'since' is ambiguous; 'because' clarifies cause. Suggest using past simple 'I had' and matching past 'loved' to indicate the father’s habit in the past. Note: If the speaker still has the bike now, keep present perfect but clarify timeframe (e.g., 'I have had a bike since I was a child because my dad loves fitness').

× So what are 6 children?

✓ We are six children.

The original is ungrammatical and likely intended to state family size. Correct structure is 'We are six children' or 'There are six of us.' The error is incorrect word order and auxiliary selection. Use a simple present 'We are' for a factual statement about family size. Alternative: 'There were six of us' if speaking about the past. Use clear subject + verb + complement order.

× And ever since we were little, each and everyone of us had our own bikes.

✓ Ever since we were little, each and every one of us had our own bikes.

Two issues: 'each and everyone' should be 'each and every one' (word choice) and punctuation/flow; also 'each and every one' is singular in meaning but context refers to possession in the past—'had our own bikes' is acceptable. Ensure correct phrase 'each and every one'. If stressing individual ownership in the past, keep past simple. If meaning continues to present, use 'has had' or 'has' accordingly.

× And we would always go out in the early mornings around 5:00 AM and just go biking for like 30 minutes to an hour.

✓ We would always go out in the early mornings around 5:00 AM and just ride bikes for about 30 minutes to an hour.

'Go biking' is not wrong colloquially, but 'ride bikes' is more natural and clearer. Also replace 'like' with 'about' for formal correctness. The modal 'would' is fine for habitual past. Suggest using 'ride bikes' or 'go cycling' and 'about' instead of 'like' in formal speech.

× I think it's not very popular since majority of people mainly prioritize food and comfort over fitness, so you wouldn't normally see bikes or bike paths in general.

✓ I don't think cycling is very popular because the majority of people mainly prioritize food and comfort over fitness, so you don't normally see bikes or bike paths.

Several points: 'I think it's not very popular' is awkward; 'I don't think cycling is very popular' is clearer. Use 'because' rather than 'since' to express reason to avoid ambiguity with time. 'Majority' requires 'the majority' or 'most people'; use 'the majority of people' or 'most people'. Maintain second-person/ general present 'you don't' rather than conditional 'you wouldn't' when making a general statement. Remove redundant 'in general'.