自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many unrelated or incorrect words (e.g. “injured”, “Dubai”, “your bike”). Give a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct pronouns and simple past tense for childhood. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words such as “because” or “so” to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood because it gave me freedom and helped me explore places near my home. For example, I often rode to the park with my friends on weekends, which was always fun. As a result, cycling became one of my favorite hobbies.

建議: The answer is mostly unintelligible and lacks a clear opinion or specific details. Start with a clear opinion (yes/no/partly) and follow with reasons and a concrete example. Use linking words such as “because”, “for example” and “however”. Mention places or situations where people ride bikes (parks, riversides, cities) to make your point specific.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities and near riversides. Many people use bicycles for short trips and exercise because they are cheap and healthy. For example, weekends are busy at the Mondohan River path, where families and cyclists ride together for leisure.

× Of course, when I was injured I had Dubai so.

✓ Of course, when I was a child I had a bicycle.

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect vocabulary ('injured' and 'Dubai' are wrong in context) and unclear structure. This fits sentence structure errors (26). Replace 'when I was injured' with 'when I was a child' to match the question about childhood, and 'had Dubai' with 'had a bicycle'. Suggestion: use clear nouns and simple subject-time phrases: 'When I was a child, I had a bicycle.'

× So right now I feel that riding a bike is everything.

✓ Right now I feel that riding a bike means everything to me.

This sentence needs clearer verb and noun relationships; it fits verb usage and -ing form issues (8). 'Is everything' is grammatically possible but sounds awkward; 'means everything to me' clarifies the intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'means everything to me' for personal importance.

× It was very fascinating and interesting.

✓ It was very fascinating and interesting to me.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but lacks a clear perspective; this is an adjective/adverb placement/style issue (13). Adding 'to me' clarifies whose opinion it is. Avoid redundant adjectives by choosing one strong adjective: 'It was fascinating.'

× So I preferred it to ride your bike when I was younger.

✓ So I preferred riding my bike when I was younger.

Original mixes pronouns and infinitive structure incorrectly; this is a sentence structure error (26). Use the gerund 'riding' after 'preferred' and match possessive pronoun to the subject: 'my bike' instead of 'your bike'. Suggestion: 'I preferred riding my bike when I was younger.'

× I think the most role they've not seen the American tweet if they're too like the five because there are there are some river in my country.

✓ I think bikes are very popular there; many people ride them because we have several rivers and scenic areas in my country.

The original is largely unintelligible with wrong words and broken structure, so classify as sentence structure errors (26). Reconstruct the intended meaning: that bikes are popular because of rivers/scenic spots. Suggestion: keep subject clear ('bikes are very popular'), give reason concisely ('because we have several rivers and scenic areas').

× So as people as people enjoy enjoy riding a bike or Mondohan River.

✓ Many people enjoy riding bikes along the Mondohan River.

This has pronoun and repetition problems and unclear noun usage; classify under incorrect use of pronouns (12) and repetition/style. Correct by using 'many people' and plural 'bikes' to match general statement, and place the location phrase 'along the Mondohan River' correctly. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and match plural nouns when speaking generally.'