自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify meaning and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two clear supporting details using correct verbs and phrasing. Avoid repetition and unclear words. For example, say who gave the bike, how old you were, and a short reason or memory. Use linking words like ‘when’ or ‘because’ to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought a bike for me when I was five, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon because I loved the sense of freedom.

建議: Make the answer more focused and coherent. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with a comparison between country and city using linking words (however, but). Be specific about why bikes are less popular in your city (terrain, infrastructure, commuting distance) and avoid vague phrases. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in flat areas and cities with good bike lanes. However, they are less common in my city because the terrain is very hilly and roads are steep, which makes cycling impractical for commuting. As a result, most people prefer motorbikes or cars for daily travel.

× Yes my my mom feed for 5/5 for me.

✓ Yes, my mom fed me when I was five.

The sentence uses the present tense verb 'feed' incorrectly for a past event and has unclear time expression. Replace 'feed' with the past tense 'fed' to match the past context (Examiner asked about childhood). Also replace 'for 5/5' with a clear age expression 'when I was five'. Add a comma after 'Yes' and remove the duplicated 'my' for natural phrasing.

× I think so. Park is quite popular in my country but not in my city because in my city there are a lot of mountains and small hills so it's very hard to ride back to get to work or school.

✓ I think so. Cycling is quite popular in my country but not in my city, because there are a lot of mountains and small hills here, so it's very hard to ride a bike to work or to school.

Multiple issues: 'Park' is incorrect and unclear—context requires 'cycling' or 'bikes'. Use the noun 'cycling' or 'bikes' to match meaning. Add articles where needed ('a lot of mountains' is okay but 'here' clarifies location). Use 'ride a bike to work' instead of 'ride back to get to work' which is ungrammatical and unclear. Also combine clauses with commas and use 'to work or to school' for parallel structure. These changes fix word choice, clarity, and sentence structure.