自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 어색하고 중복된 말버릇(umm, uh, you know)이 많습니다. 질문에 직접 답한 후 간단한 이유를 논리적으로 연결해야 합니다. 예를 들어 주제 문장으로 'No, I didn't.'로 바로 답한 다음, 'because'와 같은 연결어로 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(“riding A to ride a bike”, “you know”)을 피하고 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

範例: No, I didn’t. I lived near steep mountain roads, so it was too dangerous to ride a bike there. For that reason, I only walked or used buses to get around.

建議: 답변이 단순하고 말더듬과 반복이 많아 명확성이 떨어집니다. 먼저 명확한 주제 문장으로 'Yes, they are popular.'라고 답하고, 연결어(for example, also, because)로 이유나 구체적 사례를 제시하세요. 공원과 자전거도로에 대해 구체적 정보(장소, 활동 빈도, 사람들 유형 등)를 한두 개 더 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 문장은 2~3개로 유지하고 filler 단어(umm, uh, you know)를 줄이세요.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, the Han River park has well-maintained cycling paths that many families and commuters use on weekends. I often go there to rent a bike and cycle with friends.

× So it is too dangerous riding A to ride a bike, you know?

✓ So it was too dangerous to ride a bike, you know?

The sentence mixes gerund and infinitive forms incorrectly and has tense mismatch. Use the infinitive 'to ride' after 'too dangerous' to express purpose, and match past tense 'was' because the context is about childhood. Suggestion: use 'it was too dangerous to ride a bike' for clear, grammatically correct phrasing.

× Uh, definitely, yes. Umm, for example, in the Han River park, umm, there are well made bicycle tracks, you know, So sometimes I, when I go to the, I go, I go to there and I.

✓ Uh, definitely, yes. For example, in Han River Park there are well-made bicycle tracks, so sometimes I go there.

Multiple issues: unnecessary filler words removed and verb phrase simplified. 'Han River Park' is a proper noun and does not need 'the' (article depends on local usage; commonly no 'the'). 'Well-made' requires a hyphen as a compound adjective. 'Go to there' is incorrect: use 'go there'. Repeated 'I go, I go' is redundant. Use simple present 'go' to indicate habitual action. Suggestion: say 'sometimes I go there' for natural, grammatical expression.