自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu, tránh lặp từ và nói quá dài dòng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (mô tả màu sắc, độ tuổi khi nhận, tại sao đáng nhớ). Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "favorite color", "first present", "memorable").

範例: Yes. My dad bought me a red bike when I was eight. It was my first big present and I still remember riding it around the neighborhood because it made me feel very independent.

建議: Cải thiện phát âm và cấu trúc câu, tránh tiếng ậm ừ. Trả lời trực tiếp, rồi giải thích với một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: vì giá rẻ, tiện lợi, phù hợp giao thông đô thị) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Chú ý dùng danh từ đúng ("bikes" not "by") và giới từ hợp lý.

範例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use them to commute short distances in crowded cities, and they are easy to park compared with cars.

× When I was a child my dad bought me a bike. It is very pretty and it's at my favorite color is red and this bike is the 1st and the most memorable present in the past.

✓ When I was a child my dad bought me a bike. It was very pretty and my favorite color was red, and this bike was the first and most memorable present I ever received.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly (use past when describing a past event). Remove awkward phrasing 'it's at my favorite color is red' and use 'my favorite color was red'. Use 'first' instead of '1st' and simplify 'the most memorable present in the past' to 'the most memorable present I ever received' for natural English.

× In my country by is the most popular, uh, vehicle to move of umm, almost age of people.

✓ In my country, bicycles are the most popular means of transportation for people of almost all ages.

The sentence has word order and word choice problems. 'By' is incorrect; use 'bicycles' or 'bikes'. 'Vehicle to move of almost age of people' is ungrammatical — use 'means of transportation' and 'people of almost all ages'. Also add a comma after 'In my country' for clarity.