自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Pronunciation, grammar and coherence need improvement. Use the past tense consistently (e.g., 'I had' not 'I do have'), correct the word 'bite' to 'bike', and avoid filler sounds. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like 'when' and 'because' for clarity.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received a brand new red bike from my mum for my ninth birthday when I was at school. It was memorable because my cousin pretended to fall off and we both laughed, which made the day more fun.

建議: Improve grammar, vocabulary and sentence structure. Use plural forms correctly ('bicycles'), and form full sentences with clear reasons. Replace vague phrases with specific details and use linking words such as 'however' or 'because'. Avoid trailing off—complete your thought.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular among children and teenagers in my country. However, they are less common among adults because the roads are not designed for cycling and there are few dedicated bike lanes, which makes riding dangerous in cities.

× Yes, I do have a bite when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used incorrect pronouns/words: 'do have' (present) conflicts with 'when I was a child' (past). Also 'bite' is a mispronunciation/word choice; the correct noun is 'bike'. Use simple past 'had' for past situations. Suggestion: use 'I had' for past possession and check word choice 'bike'.

× I think that I had a bite when I was nine years old.

✓ I think that I had a bike when I was nine years old.

The verb tense 'had' is correct for past, but 'bite' is incorrect word choice. Also 'I think that' with a past fact is acceptable conversationally; if you are certain, say 'I had a bike when I was nine.' Suggestion: replace 'bite' with 'bike' and consider removing 'I think that' if certain.

× MMM my mum bring 1 brand new bike to me for my birthday when I was at school.

✓ My mum brought a brand-new bike for my birthday when I was at school.

Errors: present tense 'bring' should be past 'brought' for a past event (Past tense issue / 5), incorrect use of numeral '1' and word order 'to me' is unnecessary. 'brand new' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun. Use 'for my birthday' rather than 'to me for my birthday' unless emphasizing recipient. Suggestion: use past tense 'brought', write 'a brand-new bike', and place time phrase 'when I was at school' at end or omit 'at' if not needed.

× Umm. The funny thing is that my cousin pretended.

✓ The funny thing is that my cousin pretended to ride it.

The verb 'pretended' is intransitive here and needs a complement (what the cousin pretended to do). Provide the object or infinitive 'to ride it'. Suggestion: complete the sentence with 'to ride it' or 'to be interested' depending on meaning.

× Yes, bicycle is quite popular for younger age people, like for children umm but not for adult because in my country the road didn't decide for the bike especially so it quite hard for people in my.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular among younger people, like children, but not among adults because in my country the roads are not designed for bikes, so it's quite hard for people to use them.

Multiple issues corrected: 'bicycle' (singular) should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally (Singular and plural issue). Use 'younger people' or 'young people' rather than 'younger age people'. 'Adult' should be plural 'adults'. 'the road didn't decide for the bike' is incorrect idiom; correct to 'the roads are not designed for bikes' (present tense and correct verb choice). 'especially so it quite hard for people in my' incomplete phrase—complete to 'so it's quite hard for people to use them.' Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, use 'among' for groups, use 'designed for' to express suitability, and ensure sentences end with a complete clause.