自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar, verb forms, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. For example, change 'work to school' to 'walk to school' and maintain past tense consistently. Keep responses concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and avoid repetition.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or took the bus with my friends. Because of that, I became used to walking long distances and spending time chatting with classmates during the commute.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and make nouns plural or singular as needed. Avoid unclear fragments (e.g., 'for their. Party I received'). Aim for two to three coherent sentences with relevant details.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and school. For example, in cities and small towns you can often see people cycling short distances to save money and avoid traffic. Additionally, bikes are common for leisure on weekends, which makes them widely used across different age groups.

× My parents could not afford one at the time, so I usually work to school or rode the bus with my friends.

✓ My parents could not afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school or rode the bus with my friends.

The sentence mixes past simple ('could not afford', 'rode') with present simple 'work'. The intended action is a past habit, so use past tense 'walked'. Also 'work to school' is incorrect collocation; 'walked to school' is appropriate. To improve, keep verb tenses consistent for past narratives and choose correct verb collocations for common actions.

× Yeah, of course bikes are popular in our country because everyone use bike for their work, for their.

✓ Yeah, of course bikes are popular in our country because everyone uses a bike for their work, for their commute.

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the third person singular verb 'uses' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'use bike' needs an article and singular form 'a bike' or plural 'bikes'; here 'a bike' fits. The phrase 'for their' is incomplete; add a noun like 'commute' to complete the idea. To improve, ensure verbs agree with subjects and complete noun phrases are used.

× Party I received.

✓ (This fragment should be removed or integrated) I received a bike as a gift at a party. OR I received one as a present.

'Party I received.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and clear structure. It is unclear whether the student means they received a bike at a party. Fix by making a complete sentence with subject and verb, e.g., 'I received one as a present' or 'I received a bike at a party.' To improve, always include a subject and verb and ensure phrases are complete and clear.