自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), give one or two specific details (age, who bought it, training wheels), use linking words (but, however, eventually) to show progression, avoid fillers like "umm" and unfinished phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and finish your thought (e.g. how it influenced you later).

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six; my father bought it and it had training wheels at the sides. At first I was scared and kept falling, but after a few days I got the hang of it and began riding around the neighborhood every afternoon.

建議: Answer directly and include specific supporting details with clear linking words. Begin with a direct opinion sentence (Yes, they are popular) then give focused reasons (pandemic, health, commuting) and one concrete example (weekend trips). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences, and limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes have become quite popular in my country. During and after the pandemic many people took up cycling for exercise and as a safer way to travel, so bike sales and cycling clubs increased. For example, my family started taking weekend bike trips to nearby towns to get fresh air and exercise.

× Yes at around umm I remember 6 years old my father bought me a bike with those two like supports at the end and at first that was I was really scared but once I got the hang of it that I really enjoyed it and because of that I later on.

✓ Yes. I remember being around six years old when my father bought me a bike with those two supports at the back. At first I was really scared, but once I got the hang of it I really enjoyed it and continued riding it later on.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect word order. Use 'I remember being around six years old' to correctly express recollection (gerund after remember). 'When my father bought me a bike' places the past event clearly. 'Those two supports at the back' is clearer than 'at the end'. Remove extraneous fillers and fix clause connections: 'At first I was really scared, but once I got the hang of it I really enjoyed it and continued riding it later on.' Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, keep past tense consistent for the story, and use gerund after 'remember'. Applicable grammar problem type ID:6

× I would say yes, because in my country, especially during the pandemic, I remember that people were really stuck in their homes.

✓ I would say yes, because in my country, especially during the pandemic, I remember that people were really stuck at home.

Use 'stuck at home' rather than 'stuck in their homes' for idiomatic expression; tense is fine but preposition choice is incorrect. Keep past simple 'were' for the pandemic period. Suggestion: use consistent, idiomatic prepositions ('at home') when describing being confined. Applicable grammar problem type ID:11

× And when the pandemic like lifted, people started to go outdoors.

✓ And when the pandemic lifted, people started to go outdoors.

Remove filler 'like' for clarity and formality. 'When the pandemic lifted' correctly uses past simple to indicate the event that allowed people to go outdoors. Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal answers and keep tense simple and consistent. Applicable grammar problem type ID:5

× And because of that, people started to ride bikes.

✓ Because of that, people started riding bikes.

Use 'started riding' (verb + -ing) which is the common collocation after 'start' when describing beginning an activity. Both 'started to ride' and 'started riding' are possible, but 'started riding' is smoother here. Maintain past tense 'started' to match surrounding narration. Applicable grammar problem type ID:8

× And every weekend we would go to another city from our city, like from the.

✓ Every weekend we would go from our city to another nearby city.

The original sentence is incomplete ('like from the.') and word order is awkward. Rephrase to 'go from our city to another nearby city' to show direction clearly. 'Would go' correctly indicates habitual past. Suggestion: complete the thought and place prepositional phrases in logical order: origin first ('from our city') then destination ('to another city'). Applicable grammar problem type ID:26