自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with accuracy, word choice and minor grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid spelling mistakes ('at 1st' → 'at first', 'wrote' → 'rode'), and keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Use one or two supporting details connected with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and include a brief specific example or result.

範例: Yes. I had a small red bike with training wheels when I was little. I often rode it to the park with my friends because it made me feel independent and allowed me to practise balancing. As a result, I gained confidence and soon learned to ride without help.

建議: Focus on relevance, clarity and correct vocabulary. The answer contains wrong words ('bags' instead of 'bikes', 'shop tips', 'writing', 'countries') and unclear sentences. Start with a direct opinion, then give two clear supporting reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Be specific (who uses bikes, what for) and avoid spelling errors.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are inexpensive and convenient, so many students use them to commute to school and delivery workers use them to transport food. For example, I often see couriers weaving through traffic on bicycles in the city, which suggests bikes will remain common.

× I wrote it almost every weekend and it helped me get more confident on two wheels.

✓ I rode it almost every weekend and it helped me become more confident on two wheels.

The student used the verb 'wrote' incorrectly; the intended action is riding a bike. This is a lexical choice error but manifests in the past tense context. Replacing 'wrote' with the correct past tense verb 'rode' fixes the meaning. Also 'get more confident' is less natural than 'become more confident.' Suggestion: use accurate verbs for actions (ride → rode) and prefer 'become' for gaining a quality in past narratives.

× It even had training wheels at 1st and I used it to ride to the park with my friends because it made me feel independent.

✓ It even had training wheels at first and I used it to ride to the park with my friends because it made me feel independent.

The student wrote 'at 1st' which is incorrect abbreviation and prepositional use. Use the phrase 'at first' spelled out for clarity. No change to tense needed. Suggestion: write ordinal/adverbial phrases in full in formal speech and use 'at first' to mean 'initially.'

× Well, I think bags are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and handy for shop tips and many student and delivery workers use them.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and handy for short trips and many students and delivery workers use them.

Multiple problems: the student wrote 'bags' instead of 'bikes' (lexical error) and 'shop tips' likely intended 'shop trips.' Also 'many student' has incorrect number agreement. These are classified here as adjective/adverb and related word-choice issues and singular/plural. Corrections: change 'bags' to 'bikes' to match context, 'shop tips' to 'short trips' or 'shopping trips,' and pluralize 'student' to 'students.' Suggestion: check vocabulary for context (bike vs bag) and ensure nouns agree in number.

× For example, I often see students writing to school and countries delivering food by bike, so bikes will stay common in the cities.

✓ For example, I often see students riding to school and couriers delivering food by bike, so bikes will remain common in the cities.

The original sentence misused 'writing' instead of 'riding' and 'countries' instead of 'couriers.' These are lexical errors; additionally 'will stay common' is grammatically acceptable but 'will remain common' or 'are likely to remain common' is more natural. The issue is improper choice of present participle verbs and incorrect nouns. Suggestion: use 'riding' for traveling by bike, use the correct noun 'couriers' for delivery workers, and prefer 'remain' for stability.