自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You answered directly and showed personal feeling, which is good. To improve: make your response more natural and grammatically correct, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (age, who gave it, why it mattered). Use linking words like “because” or “and” correctly and use past tense consistently when talking about childhood events.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bright red bicycle for my eighth birthday, and it meant a lot to me because my dad surprised me with it. I learned to ride it in our neighborhood and spent hours cycling with friends, so it brings back happy memories.

建議: You expressed an opinion but the answer is unclear and grammatically inconsistent. To improve: give a clear topic sentence stating your view, then support it with two specific reasons or an example. Use correct tense and particles (e.g., say "in the last ten years"), use linking words like “however” or “because,” and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country these days. Although many children used to ride bikes, in the last ten years young people have preferred electronic devices because gaming and smartphones are more entertaining. As a result, fewer youngsters choose cycling as a hobby or a way to travel.

× And the bike that I have was when I was a child.

✓ And the bike that I had was from when I was a child.

The student used 'have' with past time reference incorrectly. The context is past possession, so the past tense 'had' should be used. Change 'was when I was a child' to 'was from when I was a child' to express origin/time. Suggestion: use past simple for past possession and use 'from' to indicate time origin.

× It's actually really meaningful for me because that's my dad sent it to me as a birthday gift while I am 8, if I remember rightly.

✓ It's actually really meaningful to me because my dad sent it to me as a birthday gift when I was 8, if I remember rightly.

Several tense and word-form issues: 'that's my dad sent it' mixes structures; use 'because my dad sent it' (simple past) to describe a completed past action. 'While I am 8' is incorrect for past time; use 'when I was 8'. Also 'meaningful for me' is acceptable but 'meaningful to me' is more natural. Suggestion: use simple past for past events and match pronouns and time expressions to past tense.

× So that's really useful and quite meaningful for me because I'm always miss my dad to look at that bicycle.

✓ So it's really special and quite meaningful to me because I always miss my dad when I look at that bicycle.

Problems: 'I'm always miss' mixes present continuous with base verb; use simple present 'I always miss'. The phrase 'miss my dad to look at that bicycle' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is that seeing the bicycle makes the speaker miss their dad, so use 'I always miss my dad when I look at that bicycle'. Also 'useful' is odd here; 'special' or 'meaningful' fits better. Suggestion: use correct verb form after adverbs (I always miss), and use 'when' to link cause and effect.

× Well, not actually, I will say that by kids popular in last 10 years, but not really popular and also modern society 'cause nowadays the children's or youngsters, they actually more prefer to look at some electronic devices, but not bicycle and not sports.

✓ Well, not really. I would say bicycles were popular among children in the past 10 years, but they are not as popular now because in modern society children and young people prefer electronic devices to bicycles and sports.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'I will say' is odd for opinion—use 'I would say'. 'By kids popular in last 10 years' is ungrammatical; use 'were popular among children in the past 10 years' (past trend). 'But not really popular and also modern society' is fragmented; clarify with 'but they are not as popular now because in modern society'. 'The children's or youngsters, they actually more prefer' is redundant and incorrect word order; use 'children and young people prefer'. 'Prefer to X rather than Y' is the correct collocation: 'prefer electronic devices to bicycles and sports'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for trends, correct collocations (prefer A to B), avoid redundant pronouns, and choose appropriate expressions for 'children' and 'young people'.