自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct grammar and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant words (you said “bag” instead of “bike”) and keep to 3–4 sentences. Also use past tense consistently and add specific details (where you rode, who with, and a brief feeling or result).

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bicycle that I loved. When I was about ten, I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood, racing each other on weekends. Those rides gave me a strong sense of freedom and happy memories.

建議: Use clearer tense and structure. Begin with a direct answer, then give 2 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”). Avoid filler words and pronoun errors (“bicycles were replaced by cars” not “I was replaced”). Keep to 3–4 sentences and include a short prediction or contrast for completeness.

範例: I think bicycles used to be more popular, but not so much now. In the past, people cycled more because there were fewer cars and traffic was light. However, nowadays many families prefer cars for convenience and speed, so cycling has declined in cities.

× Yes, I have a really nice bag when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a really nice bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' for past time. Also 'bag' is likely wrong contextually; the question asks about a bike, so replace with 'bike'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past actions or states (I had).

× I usually ride the bicycle with my friends around the units and chasing around each other.

✓ I usually rode the bicycle with my friends around the neighborhood and chased each other.

The context is past habit, so use past tense 'rode' and 'chased'. 'The bicycle' can be used, but 'neighborhood' fits better than 'units'. 'Chasing around each other' is ungrammatical here; use 'chased each other' to express reciprocal past action. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions and choose appropriate nouns ('neighborhood').

× That was really good memory.

✓ That was a really good memory.

Missing article: English requires the indefinite article 'a' before a singular count noun 'memory'. Also 'really good memory' needs 'a' to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns ('a memory').

× Yes it was, but not these days anymore.

✓ Yes, it was, but not these days anymore.

Main issue is punctuation: add comma after 'Yes'. The sentence also sounds awkward: 'not these days anymore' is redundant; better: 'but not nowadays' or 'not anymore'. However, per instruction only correct listed types; this relates to tense/word choice. Suggestion: use 'Yes, it was, but not nowadays.'

× Late olden days we didn't have so many cars, vehicles around the city, but now more and more cars and vehicles.

✓ In the past we didn't have so many cars and vehicles around the city, but now there are more and more.

'Late olden days' is incorrect idiomatic usage; use 'In the past' or 'In the old days'. Also present situation requires present tense and existential 'there are' to show increasing number: 'there are more and more'. Remove redundant 'cars and vehicles'. Suggestion: use clear time expressions and correct present tense with 'there are'.

× So the bicycles, umm, I was replaced by the cars.

✓ So bicycles were replaced by cars.

Original has incorrect subject and passive formation: 'I was replaced' wrongly uses 'I' instead of 'bicycles' and mixes pronoun. Use passive past simple 'were replaced' with plural subject 'bicycles'. Also omit filler 'umm'. Suggestion: ensure subject matches verb number and use correct passive construction ('bicycles were replaced by cars').

× So now.

✓ So now, people mostly use cars instead of bicycles.

'So now.' is a sentence fragment without a verb or clear subject. Provide a complete clause that states the current situation. Suggestion: complete the thought by adding subject and verb to explain the present result.