自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Avoid filler phrases (e.g., "you know") and unfinished endings. Also correct small grammar issues ("quite easier" → "much easier").

範例: Yes. My father bought me a pink bike when I was a child, and I rode it to school almost every day. Because my school was very close, it was much easier and quicker to cycle than to walk. I have fond memories of feeling independent and enjoying the fresh air on those short rides.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and incomplete sentences. Improve grammar (e.g., "that much popular" → "as popular"; "everybody had bike" → "everybody had bikes").

範例: No, I don't think bikes are as popular now as they used to be. For example, more people own cars and motorbikes today, so cycling is less common for daily travel. Additionally, urban traffic and lack of bike lanes discourage many adults from cycling regularly.

× I did when I was a child, my dad got me this beautiful pink bike that I would ride every day to school.

✓ I did. When I was a child, my dad got me this beautiful pink bike that I rode every day to school.

Run-on sentence and inconsistent use of 'would' for habitual past. Split into two sentences and replace 'would ride' with simple past 'rode' to describe a habitual action in the past clearly. Also add a period after 'I did' to separate ideas.

× My school was quite near to where I lived, so you know, it was quite easier for me to get to school by bike and as a kid I enjoyed it very much and also my.

✓ My school was quite near where I lived, so it was easier for me to get to school by bike. As a kid, I enjoyed it very much.

Multiple issues: unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'near', awkward comparative 'quite easier' (use 'easier'), and an incomplete trailing fragment 'and also my.' Fix by removing 'to', using 'easier', splitting into two sentences, and deleting the incomplete fragment. Add comma after introductory phrase 'As a kid.'

× Hmm, I don't think they are that much popular nowadays than, uh, what used to be.

✓ Hmm, I don't think they are as popular nowadays as they used to be.

Incorrect comparative structure 'that much popular ... than' — use 'as ... as' for equality comparisons. Also streamline phrase order: 'as popular nowadays as they used to be.'

× From small kids to adults, everybody had bike more than cars or scooter.

✓ From small kids to adults, everybody had bikes more than cars or scooters.

Count noun agreement: 'bike', 'car', 'scooter' need plural forms when contrasted with 'everybody had' referring to many people. Use 'bikes', 'cars', 'scooters'. Optionally rephrase to 'more bikes than cars or scooters' for clarity.

× They used a bike more often because.

✓ They used bikes more often before because it was a cheaper and more convenient option.

Sentence fragment ending with 'because' lacks a clause explaining the reason. Complete the sentence by providing a reason that fits the context (e.g., cheaper and more convenient). Also maintain plural 'bikes' to match general subject 'they.'