自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy, coherence and completeness. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid fillers (uh, umm), and give one or two supporting details (who gave it, how you used it, a brief memory). Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like “and” or “when” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was four, which my parents bought for my birthday. I spent a lot of time riding it in the park and learning to balance, and it became one of my earliest memories of independence.

建議: Make the answer more precise and add supporting details. Avoid hesitation words and give specific information or reasons (e.g., traffic, cost, environment). Use a linking word like “because” or “for example” to expand logically and naturally in 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and help avoid heavy traffic. For example, many people commute to work on bicycles, especially in cities where public transport is crowded.

× Yes, I have a bike. Uh, when I was 4. Umm.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was four.

The examiner asked about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. The original uses present simple 'I have' and fragments 'when I was 4.' Correct to a single past-tense sentence: 'I had a bike when I was four.' Also spell out numbers in natural speech transcription and combine fragments into one complete sentence.

× Yes, umm, most people go to work by bikes in my country.

✓ Yes, umm, most people go to work by bike in my country.

When describing means of transport with verbs like 'go' or 'travel', English commonly uses 'by' + transport noun in singular (by car, by bus, by bike). Using the plural 'by bikes' is ungrammatical. Change to 'by bike'. Additionally, ensure consistency with present simple for habitual action, which is correct here.