自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise, use correct tense and grammar, and organize it with a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repetitions and unnecessary words. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., because, so, therefore).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child and I still don’t. My parents were very strict and worried I might fall, so they never let me learn to ride. As a result, I’ve never learned how to cycle.

建議: Give a direct, well-structured response with specific reasons and a clear linking word. Avoid filler phrases and correct small grammar issues. Provide one concrete example or trend to support your view.

範例: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in the Philippines. Many people now use bicycles to avoid heavy traffic, especially in cities, and there has been a rise in bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes in some areas.

× I don't have a bike since I was a child until now and I never learned how to ride one because my parents are very strict and scared that that we that I might fall while I am riding the bicycle.

✓ I haven't had a bike since I was a child, and I never learned how to ride one because my parents are very strict and were afraid that I might fall while riding a bicycle.

Tense and verb form errors: 'I don't have a bike since I was a child until now' is incorrect because 'since' with a past starting point requires present perfect ('haven't had'). 'Scared that that we that I might fall' is ungrammatical and redundant; 'were afraid that I might fall' is correct and matches past habitual parental concern. Also 'while I am riding' should be 'while riding' or 'while I was riding' to match narrative; present perfect plus past fear fits. Suggest using present perfect for states from past to present and simplifying clause structure. Suggested improvements: use present perfect for ongoing states from a past time ('haven't had'), remove redundant words, and ensure subordinate clause tense matches the main clause.

× Yes, a little bit. But now as what I have, what I am seeing now, there are some people who are riding bike now as a means of transportation because of the traffic jam here in the Philippines Moreover.

✓ Yes, a little. From what I see now, some people are riding bikes as a means of transportation because of the traffic jams here in the Philippines.

Redundant and incorrect phrasing: 'as what I have, what I am seeing now' is ungrammatical; use 'from what I see now' or 'as I see now'. 'Riding bike' needs plural 'bikes' or 'riding a bike'; 'traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' for general conditions. 'Moreover' is misplaced at the end and unnecessary. Also keep present continuous 'are riding' to describe current trends. Suggest simplifying the sentence, remove redundant words, use correct noun number, and place discourse markers appropriately.