自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words (e.g., drop “did” after yes) and correct minor collocation (say “a children’s contest” or “a contest for children”). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had several bikes when I was a child. Most were gifts from my parents, and I also won one in a children’s contest when I was about nine. I enjoyed riding around the neighborhood with my friends after school.

建議: Improve grammar, accuracy and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct subject-verb agreement (“bikes are”), and organize supporting points with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “however”). Be specific about current trends and give one clear example. Correct vocabulary: say “four-wheeled vehicles,” “pedestrians” is incorrect for riders—use “cyclists,” and clarify the scooter situation (e.g., “e-scooters”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially as an alternative to cars. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips and there used to be a widely used bike rental system in Almaty. However, recently electric scooters have become common in city centres, which has reduced bike usage in some areas.

× Yes, I did have several bikes throughout my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had several bikes throughout my childhood.

The sentence uses the auxiliary 'did' with the past simple verb 'have', which is unnecessary for affirmative past-tense statements. Use the simple past form 'had' without 'did' for a correct affirmative past tense: 'I had several bikes throughout my childhood.' Suggestion: Remove 'did' when making affirmative past-tense statements.

× Most of them were given to me by my parents and one I won in a child contest.

✓ Most of them were given to me by my parents and one I won in a childhood contest.

The phrase 'child contest' is awkward and nonstandard. Use the noun 'childhood' to form the adjective 'childhood contest' or better 'a contest as a child' or 'a children's contest'. Also the sentence lacks a verb for the second clause; adding 'I won one in a childhood contest' or 'and I won one in a childhood contest' clarifies structure. Suggestion: Rephrase to 'and I won one in a childhood contest.'

× Yes, I would say bikes is the most popular transportation excluding the four wheels transportation, a lot of pedestrians going on bikes.

✓ Yes, I would say bikes are the most popular form of transportation excluding four-wheeled vehicles; many people ride bikes.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so it requires the plural verb 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). 'The most popular transportation' is awkward; use 'the most popular form of transportation' or 'a popular mode of transport.' 'Four wheels transportation' should be 'four-wheeled vehicles.' 'A lot of pedestrians going on bikes' is a fragment and uses 'pedestrians' incorrectly (pedestrians walk), so 'many people ride bikes' is clearer. Suggestion: Use plural verb 'are,' replace awkward noun phrases, and make a complete clause: 'many people ride bikes.'

× We used to have rental bike systems in Almaty and it's a very popular, but right now the East scooters, scooters.

✓ We used to have rental bike systems in Almaty and they were very popular, but now electric scooters are more common.

Problems: 'it's a very popular' is incorrect because the subject is plural 'rental bike systems' so use 'they were very popular' and maintain past tense 'used to.' 'the East scooters' is unclear; likely intended 'electric scooters.' Also the clause is fragmented. Rephrase to a complete sentence: 'but now electric scooters are more common.' Suggestion: Ensure pronoun agrees with plural noun, use correct vocabulary ('electric'), and form complete clauses.